Transient

I find drinking fills the hole just as well as smoke.

Young and in love
My hand is your hand
My heart is your heart
My soul is your soul
What do you want?

Young and in love
My bones are your bones
My breath is your breath
This disease is our disease
Just tell me what you need

Young and so dumb
This love is not strong
These words will burn
When the flame touches
The wax that holds the wick
When the beams all break
Those words will be
A strong reminder
Of what we had felt
And what we will feel
And the succeeding emptiness
We will forget
As soon as it passes
And we will promise
To not be so weak
But we blink
And we see
And we convince ourselves we need
This being

Young and in love
Dumb and not strong
We are born with half a heart
And we never stop searching for
Something to make us whole
Won't stop, till we're full
Won't stop, when we're old
But I stand still and cold
Warming myself with smoke
Am I just a fool?

Reviews

[Meredith Leigh]

This has SO much raw emotion in it. You can almost feel the butterflies at the begining, and the sinking as you continue to read the rest of the way through. I liked the flow, and the rhyme scheme. I also like the questioning of yourself at the end.
Great work!!

- Kriss

[Thunderlyrics]

Young love is always this way...we know not what we are getting ourselves into..and then the lesson stays with us forever.

Enjoyed reading this.

[Katherine Wyatt]

this is so very rich..
"We are born with half a heart
And we never stop searching for
Something to make us whole"
What a portrait of the human condition you have painted.. I love it!