Beautiful Grace's Demise

A poem I wrote when I was thirteen but I change every year to fit my current age, until the point comes I don't need to

Once in a kingdom with no flowers,

There was a young maiden who was trapped in a tower.

She had a pretty young face,

And kept at her own pace.

Her name meant 'Beautiful grace'.

For twenty-two long years, she was in the tower, waiting,

All of her life, her memory fading,

For the glorious day

She could proudly say

The world could go away.

For a long time, she sat in the dark

With no light, not even a hopeful spark.

She missed those she held dear

In her past years

That helped eased her fears.

In the final moment of her insanity,

She saw no sign of clarity.

Broken, she grabbed the knife hanging off her door,

Stabbed herself, crimson dripping to the floor,

And rested in misery forevermore...

Reviews

[Relinqua]

The ending is very sad, but really nice use of rhyme scheme, really hard to see poems with rhyme schemes that sound natural and yours exactly did that, it sounded so natural and the rhyming was in place, it didn't feel like an outsider. loved the concept, and a splendid job:) well done and good luck with your future works!!:)

[emipoemi]

A rather sad tale, but well constructed. A few lines seem in need of some pruning from being a bit of a mouthful, but also, except for the second stanza, the musicality seems in want of another line to rhyme with the first two (nothing long, but something is lost in the poetic flow in the way you've structured your aabbb stanzas.....something is just calling out for a third 'a' at the end). In doing so, the second stanza should follow suit. But this has potential, for I did enjoy the magic that it cast. Well done!

[KittyKatgirl]

Naww the ending was so sad but this was a beautiful piece of work. I loved it and keep up the great work :)

[Callen Stein]

Thank you so much for your support