Unknown Watcher

Unknown Watcher

A Poem by Black Rabbit

That window was open
When I went to bed last night
The dog is always barking
Something isn't right

There's someone at my back
Standing right behind the door
That guy in the midst of the night
I see him more and more

I'm finding knives upon the lawn
I didn't put them there
I have to always watch my back
He could be anywhere

I see blood that's on my walls
Now I know he can get inside
If I'm cannot be safe at home
I have nowhere to hide

I found the dog dead on the porch
at dawn today
I know that he'll take my life next
Because that is his way

I`ve take the knife and stab on his back
the blood flow in his back
i just woke up at 4:30 am (Nov.27)
then i just realized that it was just a nightmare of my 17th birthday

© 2009 Black Rabbit



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Black Rabbit
one of my nightmare that i can never forget ...>_<

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Wow! Fantastic rhyming and what a crazy nightmare! You're a very talented writer :)

Posted 3 Years Ago


Hey Good Job, well written. That is one freaky nightmare. Constantly knowing that there's someone watching you, waiting for you to slip so he can seize the opportunity, to haunt you, Terrifying. A few grammar mistakes, like If I'm cannot be safe at home( I instead of I'm ) I`ve take the knife and stab on his back ( Rephrased too I've taken the knife and stabbed his back ) the blood flow in his back ( blood flows out his back ) All in all a good job, well written, I was hooked!

Posted 5 Years Ago


"If I'm cannot be safe at home"

Posted 5 Years Ago


Great thoughts. Really needs punctuation. Grand job!

Posted 7 Years Ago


Thank you for the advice ^^ i will try harder

Posted 7 Years Ago


There were a few grammatical errors, but despite that I liked this poem. It feel eerie and creepy and the flow of it was great. It kind of was sing songy in a creepy way, at least thats how it played in my mind when I read it.

Posted 7 Years Ago


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Creepy nightmare.haha.But it was kinda awesome for me.So mysterious :D Good work.

Posted 7 Years Ago



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Added on December 30, 2009
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