Lost

The poem is about how I went insane. The picture is a reference to Sylvia Plath.

I did lose something before.

It lead me through the Mountain doors

I lost something that I could not find

It had vanished in the abyss in my mind

My sanity, it was lost forever

I refused to pull myself together

I never wanted it to be this way

I wanted the things that were, to stay.

But they did not

and my bones didn't rot.

Instead, I looked inside

I had lost it, but there it lied

The sanity that escaped my mind.

Reviews

[youngkingkwan]

Very strong words, for a strong idea. I really liked the first six lines, the last few seemed like you knew what you wanted to say but put lines extra in to make it longer. I bet you got a good mark on this for school. Have confidence in your work and keep writing. :) poems can be short

[Chris]

I understood the gist of what you were saying but the rhymes seemed forced and there were stumbles along the way.

[sassy grizzly bear]

Zoie this is a amazing piece

[Kyle Wynn]

I thought it was pretty good, it flowed nicely and it was easy to read.

[wizardlypoet8]

Okay, so i need to be able to write a piece better than this. I'll try, haha! Thanks so much for your review!

[Kyle Wynn]

It was my pleasure! And I look forward to reading what else you have!