Sorrow, one of my poems

About a special love

 

 

 

In your sorrow

I sense you're drowning

 

I feel drawn

to drown myself

 

Into the sea of sorrow

I suddenly find

myself swimming

 

Leaving the sorrows

behind

In order for our loving

to survive

Reviews

[Clouded in Hopeful Illu..]

This is a beautiful poem. I have been in this position before and feel that this describes the feeling quite well. Thank you for sharing.

"the see of sorrow" --- I think you meant the sea of sorrow.

[Lau Thiam Kok]

I liked this poem and I can relate to it in someway conceptually. It has a wisdom in it that I want learn from.

After my second time reading, strangely, I just read the poem in this way,

"In your sorrow
I sense you're drowning

I feel drawn
to drown myself

Into the sea of sorrow
I suddenly find
myself swimming

Leaving the sorrows
behind
In order for our love
to survive"

thank you....

[Silent Pacer]

This poem is very well constructed. I really like it, and can relate to the part where you state
"In your sorrow
I sense you're drowning

I feel drawn
to drown myself"

but I relate two different ways. First I thought of how a friend of mine was "drowning" and she made me feel so bad that I felt like I should drown too, but by the end of this poem, I saw that it was love that was the prominant motive, and thus thought of all those I love that I couldn't think of living without.
Very well written.