THE UGLINESS BESTOWED ON THE INNOCENCE

The ugliness of society's class discrimination

Knock! Knock!

Creaking of the door

An aristocratic ugliness

Comes answering at the door.

"Oh! come in dear boy"

Snobbery in his eyes

"Yes I will. Thank you Sir"

"Sit down boy!" "Have some pie"

" I hear you have something to tell me"

"Yes Sir I do"

"I wish to court your daughter Sir"

"I love her. I really do!"

"Hmmmh!" says the Master

Snobbery in his eyes

"Where are your credentials boy?"

"Are you noble?" "Are you rich!"

"I am neither, thank you Sir"

"I'm just a common boy,

But I have big heart Sir"

"Enough!" said the Master

"Don't waste my time"
"Off with you boy!"

"Sorry to disturb you."

"Yes I will Sir"

The boy witnessed snobbery

For the very first time.

And then the door closed

The snobbery all inside.

Reviews

[θεά]

Beautiful, beautiful this is!

I love the way you've shown the binaries that exist in a society which moves on the fulcrum of class. The boy is earnest, humble and eager, while the aristocrat is unflinching, apparently impervious and hence incapable of redemption. The way you've managed to show the shallow sneering of the "haves" against the "have-nots" in such few lines is commendable.

The notion of poetic justice is well meted out with the final lines, "And then the door closed/ The snobbery all inside", as if to suggest that such narrow-minded, petty arrogance can only imprison the bearer of such malevolence, not the one whom he shows it to.

Good job, A, as always reading your work is a pleasure.
Best, M.

[andrew mitchell]

Thank you so much for your great review Malika. its so true in a society the class system reeks of snobbery over the ages in english aristocracy. Like the story Christmas Story by Charles Dickens! lol:)

[θεά ]

Hah! And don't even get me started on Miss Havisham in Dickens' 'Great Expectations'! :)

[andrew mitchell]

lol.....................................lol................

[Bear]

Oh to measure up to the expectations of someone blind to potential, to be judged worthy or not by your social standing or the balance of your bank account. Great job, you captured the reality of an event that happens much to often all through history, even unto today. Clap! Clap! Clap!

[alifeacoustic]

Love it Andrew. The final line is brilliant and sums it up perfectly. I can imagine the relief of the young man locking the door behind him. I feel the very same way when invited to weddings, it's almost like I hold my breath until they are done, in feeling at least.

[sereenaoutloud]

You are truly talented. This is very relatable piece. All fathers should cherish their daughters but lets hope their wishes for her go beyond the mighty dollar.

[Jamestown]

Another fantastic piece, so true these things happen, personally
I could care less about what the young man has for money,
but is he rich spirituality, now that is a must to even
think about getting close to one of my girls! Thanks for sharing and b-blessed!

[alf]

Andrew. What a brilliant put-down of self-imagined grandeur. Hope you put a copy inside his letter box!!!! addressed to him !!!! Loved it, alf

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Yup... The very sad fact is, that these kind of stuff still happen. You did an amazing job! I really hope to see more from you. :)