Addicted (Jorio)

Addicted (Jorio)

A Poem by Imperfection
"

Sometimes we cling to things because they contain a special memory that we think we cannot live without.

"

 

The smell of nicotine

Hangs around her faithfully

A remembrance of him,

She cannot let go.

 

                 ~

 


© 2008 Imperfection



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"The smell of nicotine
Hangs around her faithfully
A remembrance of him,
She cannot let go."

Well, Jorio is one of my favourite forms of writing poems, as often there is a huge depth in four lined poetryBut on the same hand, writing a Jorio is a very tough job, because it is indeed very hard for anyone to describe a strong feel in just four lines! Your last Jorio "Invaluable" is still my favourite and will always be, because of its depth
And this again is such a powerful poem Here, the first two lines explains about her character and her inevitable loss which now forced her to live only with memories and smell of nicotine (which is the only faithful thing for her now), while the ending lines are acting more as a concluding section, explaining for the reason behind her present conditionfor what she was (with him) and for what she is now (with only his memories)

So, overall it is a GREAT work, with such a beautiful yet sad emotion behind it
You have really tried your level best to tell yourself that now he is gone, but thoughHe is still with youHis remembrance is still with you, which even you can't let go!


"Sooner or later in this world, everyone will break your heart and it is only for you to decide, who is more worth of.the pain or the person!"


Posted 9 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.




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Heart wrenching , at the end the unsaid part of story comes alive making heart heavy.

Posted 3 Months Ago


I wish I could write like this. A very good Jorio and I also hang to my nicotine like a lost lover. Cool stuff.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Nicely written and expressed in form, vivid and creates an imprinted emotional impression,
beautifully done, I really enjoyed reading this, thanks.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

WHAT AM I?: Nephilim WHAT AM I?: Nephilim
A teen boy gets killed, but trades his soul for another chance. He changes. A girl notices the new boy with silver eyes.
I love this because I feel the same away about smoking.
It won't leave you, break you, and always remains faithful.
More men need to take after the habit. :]

Posted 8 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Oh, You definitely said so much with so little words. Letting go is so very hard sometimes. Beautiful written and so sad. I loved it!!!

Posted 8 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Short, simple and sweet. I really enjoyed this one!

Posted 9 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

For such few words this poem holds a punch. I truly enjoyed it. Thanks for sharing.

Posted 9 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

A good jorio but it's not a clerihew.

Sal

Posted 9 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

I turn now to you and ask, "What are the rules of the jorio? All I know is that it was the partial name of an Italian poet, but I am not familiar with the rules. I'd like to hear about them from you so I can write some poems in that form. Thanks, poet!

Sal

Posted 9 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Am I missing something? This is a good poem but not a clerihew which this contest requires.

Sal

Posted 9 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.


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