The Last Chat

Here's the second one!!!! hoping for some good reviews

I can still remember that last chat

between you and me

Cause we'd never met after that

Could we?

It was neither too large nor too brief

Was just a 20-25 minute chat

But it put my whole life into an endless grief

Now it's too late and i can't do anything except cursing that

Cause my life is now like a dried leaf

It was the first time when I was getting that innocent feeling

Which I was hesitating to say

I think you could also feel the same thing

But we both were feeling shy to say

You suddenly opened your mouth and gave me the worst news of my life

Which took my breath away

You were going to be somebody else's wife

Your marriage was been set by your parents on Sunday

I felt like my heart was being cut into the small pieces by a knife

I felt like that I was drowning into the deepest bay

And couldn't get out of it even after a tough strive

When you were walking away

I could feel your hazel eyes in pain

But I couldn't stop you anyway

And  led my whole life crying in vain

But I can still remember that last chat

between you and me

Cause we'd never met after that

Could we?

Reviews

[Padma]

Nice job Aaradhya..I think you should write a few more lines about how that girl was...what u felt about her...and then the parting scene would bring out the pain in this poem. The choice of words is very good. should work a bit more on the rhyming part though. Hey! aaradhya pls don't mind my words...i myself am learning...am no poet myself. take care. keep writing. :)