Empathy

The way I sometimes feel when I view the world.

Cry for me tonight.
Shadows in the light.
Just one tear that flows.
Would calm all the woes.
So dark and mad,
So weak and sad.
I see it clear,
The ail so real.
So please oh please,
Let the cruel world weep,
Let the tears settle and seep.
Let it saturate the soul,
Let go of all control.
Show me the world,
Tossed and twirled.
New and reformed,
The Earth transformed.
By one solitary tear,
Imprisoned by fear,
Fallen and now free,
So that all could see,
The way life could be without plight.
Please won't you cry for us tonight?
Cry cry cry for....
The lost and tormented,
The dead and lamented,
Cry cry cry for....
The hungry, the poor..
The hidden and obscure,
The orphaned and deprived,
And all those they survived.
Cry for them, for you, for me..on this night.
For I'll be sure to cry for all of us tonight.

Author's Note

Let me know what you think...Thanks for reading!

Reviews

[Virtue]

It's very deep and thoughtful and incorporates beautifully crafted language (that rhymes-something I'm not all that good at) that really strikes home. It's pure emotion that invigorates the longing for change and good things in life. To me, your poem is shadowed by darkness and negative emotions, but underlying that there is a pleading for hope, and that really hits home for me. I'm glad I read this; thank you for sharing! :)

[Jordan]

Reminds me of the stuff I used to write. I'd upload all of my old poems if I still had them but I went through this phase where I just wanted everything I wrote to burn. It's like in the movies when you see an artist destroy his studio. If it was on paper I trashed, shredded or burned it. If it was electronic I deleted it. If it was posted somewhere I deleted the account. This makes me miss that. It hits me in the heart. It speaks to me. It whispers actually. Raw and real. My how I've missed seeing things like this.

[closed]

emotive and almost brooding

signifying as much as it
alludes

quite brilliant really


-Dream

[Aveira Corbett]

Thank you very much... :)

[Brooklyn]

Holding the world on your shoulders is a lot, but you should also write about the beautiful things. The duality of bad and good is a lot to ask to put on someones shoulders when your talking about all the bad and good in the world. "Deep and dark your poem is" I imagine yoda would say ;)

[Aveira Corbett]

Thank you for your review, and for reading it. I will see how I can incorporate more goodness in respect to the world into my writing in the future. I am sure that'll be a task for me. :)

[Stephen]

Awesome!!! i really liked this poem. Would should mourn for each other and care for one another, but in this day and age, people don't care. They are so selfish, and so consumed with self that they can't make time to cry for others. Thanks for sharing

[Aveira Corbett]

Thank you for taking the time to read and review it.

[Stephen]

no problem