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If I were a lunatic

If I were a lunatic

A Poem by Elizabeth


if I were a lunatic
the world would be orange
or purple
or inside out

down would be left
and squares would smell like tangerines

if I were Alice, I would smash the looking glass
and hide my meds under my tongue
until lights out

but I am not a lunatic
and the world is not orange
or purple
or inside out

and squares have never smelled like tangerines

© 2011 Elizabeth



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Interesting, a little poem that builds absurdities and then completely reverses them all by the end. An interesting read, and almost a little hopeless about our ability to change things. You seem to be a big Alice fan, have you read the original Lewis Carroll? He's one of my biggest influences!

Posted 5 Months Ago


i like this. in a world that oftentimes makes no sense, sanity can be a grey area. was Van Gogh crazy, a genius or both? this is refreshingly honest and creative. nice work ...

Posted 7 Months Ago


I chose well in my first read of yours.. This is such a wonderful piece. Its as if shel silverstein sat down with Alice and the Cheshire cat to concoct this potion of words. I also appreciate the point of view- a creative take on a creative mindset. People often shy away from poems that illicit mental "illness" (quotations because they are not truly illnesses). Well done.

Posted 7 Months Ago


Elizabeth

7 Months Ago

I appreciate the feedback. This old piece is one of my personal favorites. And She’ll and I go way.. read more
Elizabeth

7 Months Ago

*Shel - damn autocorrect.
Chase

7 Months Ago

I knew what you meant! Haha
things would be different. but its the way it is intended to be. thanks for the lovely poetry,.

Posted 9 Months Ago


not all(or any) mentaly ill, for lack of a better word, people see stuff like that.

Posted 2 Years Ago


DRAGO

2 Years Ago

I'm not trying to offend you. Im not saying you shouldn't use that word. I just believe people deser.. read more
Elizabeth

2 Years Ago

"You shouldn't say lunatic."

I beg to differ.

If you want to offer a.. read more
DRAGO

2 Years Ago

alright, good, no more arguing
What a feisty rebel. Nice read, thank you for sharing.

Posted 2 Years Ago


Elizabeth

2 Years Ago

Ha! The rebel in me will never die. Thanks for your review :)
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Gee
Like this,lunacy should be made compulsory on Sunday's.Would perhaps visit the church then

Posted 2 Years Ago


Elizabeth

2 Years Ago

Thanks for the review :)
Good to be a lunatic. The world is a better place.
I like you description and wants. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote


Posted 2 Years Ago


You should seriously write a book containing all your Wonderland work!!!

Posted 2 Years Ago


Elizabeth

2 Years Ago

Thats an interesting idea. Thank you for the compliment ;)
Love this one. Although I have to confess Ive felt more like the mad hatter recently...

Posted 2 Years Ago



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Wonderland, TN



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