Clouded

Clouded skies, 

slanted eyes,

no motivation,

no reason to try.

Life's getting dark 

emotions run dry.

Einsteins notions flow when im high.

All alone I sit and I vibe.

Never needed no one 

and that's word till i die.

Im not an honest person. 

I steal and I lie.

For the benefit of my people 

I hustle and grind,

but now there all buried,

gone from my mind.

A faded memory, 

a relic of time.

Not by my choice

but ill be damned if i cry.

Trust and loyalty was my demise. 

Reviews

[SmittyJas]

Very well written poem to the effect of loneliness.

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I love this one...maybe my favorite :)

[youngkingkwan]

BLitZeD, this is probably my favourite piece from you. Bravo.

[BLitZeD]

thank you sir glad u enjoyed

[dan]

Blitzed, your talent is evident at all times, but never moreso than in this piece. Asserting one's power is not wrong unless that power is abused. This is written in such a way as to express that your power has been rightfully earned, so use it!! take care...dan

[Beth Lindsay]

'Wow' is the only word that I can think of right now. The words are extremely powerful in how you used them.

[BLitZeD]

thank you very much, highly appreciated

[Pash]

I dig it! I enjoyed the rhythm from line to line. Smooth transitions that flows through out
the piece. You painted a poetic picture of something authentic. I was feeling it.
Thank you so much for sharing.
Keep writing! Keep creating!
DB

[BLitZeD]

thanks for your time man, glad you enjoyed it

[silent poet]

FLAWLESS... you like to rhyme, I get it. But it's more to that in what you write. If you focus more on what you want to say or feel? all your ever say or write WILL be AMAZING.. by this piece alone, I can see that.. perfectly flawless

[BLitZeD]

thank you that really means alot to me

[silent poet]

My pleasure, you're welcome