how to live

how to live

A Poem by V M Smith

just take it

 

relax your muscles

and move with the hits

then maybe your ribs

won't break like last time

 

imagine falling

jumping on your own

eyes closed, body fluid

 

relax, relax

 

be somewhere else

the ultimate introvert

existing in your mind only

 

let it happen, don't give in

and they'll stop eventually

lay there in subtle difiance

of reality

 

i don't care anymore

© 2013 V M Smith


Author's Note

V M Smith
I fully appreciate reviews, especially when they tear apart my work in an attempt to make it better. Rip, tea, break it down. Tell me how you do not like it, how to make it better. I want your opinion. Truly.

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Wonderful write. Truly amazing.
I like the description of the certain point when your entire being realizes that the way to survive is to close yourslef.

A.M.

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

The only change I think I would make would be to change the final line to simply "apathy". All in all a very great write!

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I good effort in showing a struggle within. I don't like how it ended with giving up but meh its alright

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Added on May 20, 2008
Last Updated on August 9, 2013
Tags: live, beat, poem, abuse, depressed, sad, introvert, relax

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i'm not a writer; i am a liar. i sometimes write far too specifically; i sometimes write so vague even i lose track of what it is i'm on about. i tend to write when i can't think. this seems to be.. more..

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