not a triangle

it's not a triangle
it's just an angle
the two of us are not connected
you are the one choosing
which line to walk
i'm just hanging out to your left
and she to your right

if it were a true triangle
she and i would be connected
directly
but we only know each other
through your angle
it's not a triangle

i'm just hanging out
at my open vertex
waiting for you to look my way

can you look at me again?
please?
she gets more attention...
more iloveyous

i'm glad it's not a triangle though
because if i had a line to her
not through you
i might loop it around her and
leave her tied in the closet

but you'd find her
by following the line
connecting the two of you

because even though
she keeps looking
in the other direction...
you're line to her is more set

i'm sorry
but it's not a triangle
and i wish it was just a line
but angle it is

 

babe,
it's not a triangle

Author's Note

I fully appreciate reviews, especially when they tear apart my work in an attempt to make it better. Rip, tea, break it down. Tell me how you do not like it, how to make it better. I want your opinion. Truly.

Reviews

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hmm... betrayal in love is something that pains a lot... a hell lot... been there..felt that... it hurts to realise that u' re not the only one...u were'nt the special someone... my story it was a polygon.. 200 angles(lol.. i find it pretty funny to think bout it now )

i love the line...
i'm sorry
but it's not a triangle
and i wish it was just a line
but angle it is

the pain in the work literally bleeds out... and adding to the misery is the fact that the lover is more inclined towards the other...

also i loved...

it's not a triangle
it's just an angle
the two of us are not connected
you are the one choosing
which line to walk
i'm just hanging out to your left
and she to your right


by placing yourself on the left you once again subtly hint the preference given to the other... and the painfull connection between you and the other girl/guy via the lover once again gives the anguish a whokle new dimension....

your core's angelic for you accept your lover after the cheating but your human side comes into play when you cannot forgive the other in
"i might loop it around her and
leave her tied in the closet"

but then again the lines "but you'd find her
by following the line
connecting the two of you"
pour in even more misery and pain...


haven't ever connected with any work like this one....

wonderful work...

but then... if this is more than a poem for you... i suggest moving on... and loving your ownself is the biggest happiness in the world... i wish you for more and more happiness....


take care...:)

niki :)