Cracks And Tributaries

She pulled at the fraying ends of the carpet, sitting cross-legged, staring at the wall. The cracks on the wall looked like little tributaries, branching off the larger crack to the top right side of the wall. She dreamed of the palm trees, that’s what she believed them to be called, that hung over the vast Nile, the nightmarish fish they lay within its waters. She had learned about it in school, and it had always interested her, she had always dreamed of going there. Dreams lose their meanings when they lose their significance, she thought. Through the dirty window, she saw a yellow-grey tinted sky; and she imagined what the grass felt like, what the flowers smelled like and what the sound of rain on concrete was like. With the last pangs of sunlight shining through the fast covering clouds, she could see the dust specks floating through the air in her room and she coughed. What a desolate life I have, she said to herself, and kept on staring at the crack and its tributaries,

Author's Note

What do you think?

Reviews

[Ari M.]

It seems like it would make an interesting novel. Having her escape where she seems to be trapped and finding some place that would be like the Nile to her, even if it were just a weed covered field. Besides this, could you be more clear about the setting or is it a sort of symbolism? Nice job, though.

[K.]

Thank you very much, Ari. I appreciate your comments. I do like your thoughts; that would be very interesting! I'm not much of a novel writer though, more of just a short story kind of girl. But the setting is she is captive in some sort of cellar, captive due to her own limitations though. If she was captive to someone else, she probably would have tried to climb through the window or something. Sorry it's not a very good explanation, I don't always think deeper into the backgrounds of my little stories. But thank you, actually, because maybe that will help me grow as a writer and help me improve my stories. Thank you so much!

[Ryanicus]

That's was great! Your use of description reaaally brought the story to life! I can tell you spent a lot of time conveying the emotions effectively, you got me there. :) Awesome work!

[K.]

Thank you so much for reading and commenting! I'm glad you enjoyed it :)