treat me like a little girl

you treat me like a little girl,

not that i mind,

but you take care of me like a dazzling,precious pearl,

i love that about you because your touch is so kind,

you treat me like a adorable little child,

who always needs their strong big brother to hold on to,

its because of you im not wild,

im like an obedient child whos told what to do,

i dont mind since im treated so kindly,

even if you treat me like a little girl you find it cute,

its because of you i dont mind,

sometimes i stare at you and go mute

but even if i do that you dont care,

because then i do something that you just smile and say aww too,

and thats hugging my teddy bear,

and that something i only do infront of you.

Author's Note

please correct me if you see an error or if you think I should change something up. thank you.

Reviews

[FayteX]

Errors huh. Okay.
1. Grammar. Every "i" should be capitalized.
2. Line 3 dazzling, precious. Watch the spacing on the comma.
3. Line 5 "like a adorable" the "a" should be "an"
4. Line 7,8,9 "im" should be "I'm"
5. Line 7,11 "its" should be "it's"
6. Line 8 "whos" should be "who's"
7. Line 11,13 "dont" should be "don't"
8. Line 16 "thats" should be "that's"
Also watch your endings and know where to place periods.

[yuki]

thank you I didn't even catch any of those :)

[For Who I Am]

I love this poem! It reminds me of my relatives. Very good Job! :))

[yuki]

Thank you! :)

[Hibiki]

I like this~!
Really sweet and kind nii-chan ;)
Great job ^^

[yuki]

Hehe thank you :) its cause my nii-chan is the best :)

[jade~green]

You made me miss my brother, its beautiful. I am going to read more.

[yuki]

thank you and please do :)