RAIN, RAIN

A short poem about the rain

Wake up and see Rain

Wake up and hear the Rain

Don't want to get out bed

Just want to stay in bed and listen to the Rain

Get ready and still hear the Rain

Leave and still hear and see the Rain

Go outside and get Rained

Go inside and see and hear the Rain

Leave the classroom and still see and hear the Rain

Go to the library and still hear and see the Rain

Go to get supper and still hear and see the Rain

Go to practice and still hear and see the Rain

Go back to the library and still hear and see the Rain

Leave the library and still hear and  see the Rain

Go the dorm room and still hear and see the Rain

Get a shower and still hear and see the Rain

Go to bed and still hear and see the Rain

Reviews

[Natasha]

I love the rain! As well as the flow to this poem. Rain is calming for me, so I love this!

[Justin]

thanks : ) :) :) I sometimes just turn off my electrics and listen to it :)

[Natasha]

I fall asleep to the sound of rain!

[Justin]

me too, I fall asleep wherever lol

[earthperceptions]

I really like the shape of this poem and how there is a lot of pattern like the rain in real life. The list form works very well! The poem seems to rise and fall with your language as the sound of rain does throughout the day.

[Justin]

thanks :) :) :) it has a certain flow to it :)

[Bluefire]

Must rain a lot where you're from but I gotta say that's a quite relaxing piece.
Well done. ^^

[Justin]

thanks :) :) :) i like it and it helps me sleep too :)

[Bluefire]

You're welcome x3

[Brooklyn]

Goodness you must live in Seattle, I favor the rain as well, and gloomy cloud covered skies :)

[uNmAsKeD-dEluSiOns]

I love rain and I love how you described it like this- in a more repetitive way to really get the message through, good job. If I could hear rain all the time I would. I'd rather it be rainy every day then sunny.

[Relic's Bare Trees]

Seems like a perfect day to a rain lover such as myself.

[closed]

nice addition. you're a wonderful poet.

-Dream

[Preliving]

I live in Ireland so LOVE this poem. I like the circle you created here, could also be a comment on a negative mental state perhaps? Let something affect you at the beginning and it's all you'll "hear and see". Nice one!

[Maria Kay Clary]

Good repetition. I wish I could do that mine always have to rhyme lol.

[Justin]

thanks :) this is the first time i ever used rhyme in any of my material :)

[Maria Kay Clary]

Yea your welcome!

[gabrielle]

Rain is a great personification of the one we admire and love. I like the repetition you applied here. :)

[Justin]

thanks :) :) :) first time i have ever used repetition in my work :)