blood bath of tears

BLOOD BATH

APRIL 29 1996:

A man name Jack was found in a swimming pool drown and stabbed to death by needles. There were a woman who was with jack at the time. Her name is Jan she have a crush on jack for a while. Jack ask Jan to come over and she say ya. Later that nite they were in the living room Jack know that Jan want to be with him. But Jack didn't feel the same way about Jan.

He told her the news between both of them. Jan was heart broken and ran out of the house. Later at that same nite she went back to jack house for the last time. She wait for jack in his bed room. Jack enter his bed room and Jan jump at Jack with a kitchen knife. She slid his shoulder when she ambush him.

Jack try to run out of the house but trip trying to jump over the bed to get to the pool room. Jan drag him to the pool room and try to drown him but keep on slipping from her grip because of the bloody red water.Stress out and getting tire she took out needles and start sticking them in his face and the side of his neck. then slid his neck after 30th painful needle stuck in his skull. 30 Min later Police came and found them in the pool room with blood all over.

Jan was found in a bath tub tacking a blood bath as you can say with her own blood. She was cutting her self after the murder cutting the worlds (why, how can you , why me , die , s**t , ho, baster , kill me) all over her body with a needle. she die do to blood lost and passing out in the tub where she drown in her own blood. 3 weeks later cops found love letters from Jack send to Jan in Jan home. he send them as a joke. but end up getting him self screwed for it. THE END

Author's Note

ya i draw the pic that u see on blood bath of tears here a pic of my other drawings if u wanna see hope u like them http://bloodysnows.deviantart.com/gallery/ also the story blood bath of tears is on there to hope u like them ^^

Reviews

[BenightedWhispers]

I like the theme and plot for the story. However, numerous grammer and spelling errors.
name= named
were=was
jack-Jack
Her name is Jan she have a crush on jack for a while. - Her name was Jan she had a crush on Jack for a while.
ask=asked
Jack ask Jan to come over and she say ya. = Jack asked Jan to come over, and she said yeah.
Later that nite they were in the living room Jack know that Jan want to be with him. But Jack didn't feel the same way about Jan. = Later that night, they were in the living room. Jack knew that Jan wanted to be with him.However,Jack didn't feel the same way about Jan.

That's only a few to help you get started. ^^