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A funny poem

Gray was the day you slipped away

Out of my grasp, you left my path

 

The hours gained power

As they’ve passed on the clock tower

 

Years have come and gone

Life has moved on

 

Sun has warmed my frozen heart

Prepared me for a new start

 

For you, my vengeance has turned to dust

Along with my lust

 

Time has ran its course

Thank God for divorce

Reviews

[The Perfectionist]

Cute ending, decent premise, good word choice. Horrible, horrible rhythm. Two lines that are supposed to rhyme (especially in couplets) should be the same length, and twice you come closer to double than equal. Breaks the flow and distracts from the rest of the poem. Clean that up.

[Mauricio Montoya]

to me I see the willing to break the emotional chain to truly be free but then there is the legal one that becomes a battle that we give thanks once its over.
great job.

[Coyote Poetry]

Thank you for your always amazing poetry. I loved the surprise ending. Sometime best way to win. Is to be apart. A excellent poem.
Coyote

[Darkest Rose]

I love this! The last part made me laugh so good for that made this poem even better! Amazing write thanks for sharing it with us :)

[The Analog Kid]

Nice progression of feelings and a humorous ending:)

[Tina Kline]

Love the ending on this great poem. I really enjoyed reading this.

[Poe Redd]

Haha! That's... sad but great ending!

[M Garcia]

Wonderful flow, real. Things always have a way of working out in a way you didn't expect. Great work, Marie.

[ForTheWorld]

ouch!!! sad poem..but it's great

[Michael of Gilead]

hehehehehe