Soundtrack

Hmmm.. This is what happens when I listen to too much Greg Brown in the early afternoon.

I am a skipping record, too many times played

Scritched and scratched and poorly patched

The romantic ballad, permanently delayed;

Lied beneath the stars one night, did the math

And I figure, problem is, got stuck on one track

Followed that dream until it died of remorse

Now I know I can't ever get those hours back

So I'll rewrite the soundtrack, change the course

 

Play it loud enough, easy mind will change again

Perhaps an open mind can really be a curse

Yet I know the tree won't break if it will bend;

Life: crazy thing one can't ever plan or rehearse

Some people just die stuck in a tired old dirge

Never dare change the song, filled with false fear

Submit to common sense when they feel an urge

There's music, everywhere, that they'll never hear

 

Rolling with the flow of a cacaphony of sound

I'll let my mind ramble onward to a better place

Or 'least a different one, if better can't be found

Take it nice and slow, refuse to run the ratrace

And I'll dance, I'll dance like a fool, mad-happy

I'll sing and I'll sing like I feel every word, inside

Every tune, be it sorrowful, or bland, or sappy

I'll play the skipped old record, enjoying the ride

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

This is what happens when I listen to too many Greg Brown songs in the early afternoon.
Enjoy the journey into my mad mind. :)

Reviews

[Michael]

any poem that uses Onomatopoeia well is a great poem in my book! Scritched is a wonderful word. I also like the internal rhyme used there. In face the only think I can even think of that might, and it is a slim chance at that, improve the flow would be to make the second line of each stanza have an internal rhyme to it. Well, on second though just forget it - it needs nothing at all.

Simply wonderful!


I did find a couple of nits:

cacaphony = cacophony
ratrace = rat-race

[Melissa Kesead]

Wonderful poetic melody!

[reca-becca]

omg! I love this writting! you are definatly one of my finalists! I Love the line
Life: crazy thing one can't ever plan or rehearse
Thats so true! and I love the last line
I'll play the skipped old record, enjoying the ride
Thats what we all should do1 thanks for your submition to the no is all we get contest1

love,
reca-becca
xoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxo

[DreamWalker]

Everyone else seems to have said it. Wonderful
I particularly liked the line: There's music, everywhere, that they'll never hear. The imagery that conjures!
Thank you

[Michael Carr]

a great flow, and the lines give out a feeling of old nostalgia.
like a bob dylan song that makes sense.
the imagery is amazing and you connect it so well with the inner thoughts and feelings of your work's voice.
well done again constance.
and I agree. you are quite mad. :)

[WordMaster]

Your imagery is outstanding and your comparison marvelous for this subject matter

I enjoyed the line� "Perhaps an open mind can really be a curse..." very compelling

The timing and pace of this poem also works well for the message being presented

Looking forward to reading more from you �

Bravo

[Hotel Mornings]

the pace and flow of this poem reminds me of a song. The line "Some people just die stuck in a tired old dirge," really stuck out to me. I'm so obsessed with the idea of not trying to fall into a rut that I try too hard to "change my song." I'm happy that I read a few of your poems before I came to this one, tho, I'm going to have to come back and read some more. Usually, I don't like too many end rhymes but it fit this poem very well, just kept the flow/music flowing. I also like the lack of periods, this poem works well just flowing into the next line. It seems like you thought about the form instead of just putting it all together (which is definitely something I need to work on). good read.

[doreen cyr]

think is an awesome write I do relate to this
doreen

[imm's place]

sounds very insightful and an interesting outtake on life. mary

[Rodney Russ]

I read it aloud and it possessed a deeper meaning to me. Perhap[s it's more effective read aloud rather than on the paper. A very strong poem. Very contrasting of your other work. Looking forward to reading more of your work. So don't hesitate to send me a read request.