Eyes

Eyes

A Poem by C-Trainer
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A man talking to his wife at her viewing.

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Eyes

 

"to the world, your eyes weren’t that specIal, but to me they were the world,

looking at them, was like looKing through a portal to your soul,

greener than fresh grass, more beautIful than the stars,

I could read them Like a book, and knew whether you were happy or mad,

knowing you that welL, made it easy for me to live,

I hate seeing you this way, and when you were asleEp,

because I loveD seeing your greens, staring up at me,

you were my everything, I loved you with all my Heart,

I can’t Explain what happened, or why you did what you did,

but this is what you get b***h, when youR eyes stopped being for me!"




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© 2010 C-Trainer



Author's Note

C-Trainer
This is the first poem that I ever wrote, and it is a visual poem. Although this is being whispered by the man, I decided to include a secret message to give a creep factor, and so the readers could see what happened, if it didn't come across at first glance. I wrote this for my creative writing class, and they all had the reaction that I was hoping I would get, so hopefully you do as well.

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Very creative write here. I like this and loved the ending part of it the best.

Posted 6 Years Ago


Oh wow. Lol at the ending. This is really creative. I've never seen a mock eulogy with a hidden message on this site before. ...or ever, really. Your imagery was beautiful and the so is the picture you chose for it. Nice job.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Kind of creepy. I guess that's what you get when a serial killer gets his hands on a strumpet with pretty eyes. well done.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Now this was simply amazing and stating facts, Like this alot.
This is a very well written vent here. Very creative as well.
I enjoyed this.

Posted 7 Years Ago


i remember this from before. everyone was like "whaaaaat?" really well-done. cool concept.

Posted 7 Years Ago


its say KILLED HER right?, wow.... this is really good, angry because she had a lover, maybe? idk thats the impression i got

Posted 7 Years Ago


Well C.. I see you jumped the river divide and did a fine job too I must add.
So much said in such a short space..
Edgy, frightful and well written.
Kudos My friend!!

Posted 7 Years Ago


Creative... interesting... and yes, a little creepy. :) Goal achieved.

Posted 7 Years Ago



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Added on February 16, 2010
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