Meaning Of Life

What is the meaning of life

if your loved one don't love you?

What is the meaning of life

if your family is cracked in halves?

Whats is the meaning of life

if you aren't accepted?

What is the meaning of life

if no one care about you?

What is the meaning of life

if you have nothing left?

  

Author's Note

What do you think of it? Pls be honest! Very honest!

Reviews

[crazysox]

I love it! There's a few grammar mistakes, but I especially like how you repeated the first line over and over again. It made it more dramatic. Keep up the creativity!

[Sam]

I wanted more information and more use of intellectual words. Other then that it was great.

[Layla Anne Massaro]

Can be improved but good.

[Priyankaabhilaashi]

Good one..!!!

[李[A]]

Hmm... What I like about this poem is it's constant repetition of the first phrase. I also like the anaphora of the "if" every single stanza (line 2). It's also a combination of rhetorical question at the same time! The use of rhetoric and pathos was displayed well. As a next step, I would possibly include this in a larger poem or piece of writing. This is because, alone, this poem seems to be more conscience thought. To add structure, some external feature should be provided. Hope to keep seeing more of your writing. Good luck!

[guiltyascharged]

Oh wow! This is really deep and thoughtful, I love it! I think you copied from my problems I've been telling you about in stanzas 1-3 maybe the 4th stanza too! I love it, either way!! :D

[Call Me Blu]

I like it. But it feels a bit frayed, as if you forgot that you were writing it. I would like to see it more slicked and dark.

[stars are far]

This is very nice...great and strong ..
And when you lose the most important things in life you have nothing more left so it is better to die and say goodbye to this life ..it is so hard to live when you don't have the most important things like family and love, then your life would be worthless ..
Great work ...

[Thea]

Great questions...Gotta find some answers... :)

[Fontane Wong]

The questions that you asked in every stanza strongs the point of this poem. I love how the way you use questions to write this poem. You have clearly written out what's the meaning of life if we don't have this or that. Simple, short but descriptive. Well penned. Another masterpiece.