Your Smile

Your Smile

A Poem by Abderrahmane Dakir
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For everyone that give us a wonderful smile that give a joy to any person's heart

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Your smile incites all our
Thoughts to be relaxed within your sight
Troubles to be melted in your path,
Senses to be mesmerized in your eyes
Issues to be solved upon your ways,
Feelings to be excited by your voice
Worries to be dissolved into your waves.

Your smile helps us to
Follow our passion of discovery
Seek our desire in priceless treasury,
Read our books in the library
Improve our skills in major literary
Expand our essay to a well-read story
Find our love poetry.

Your smile changes our
Loneliness to togetherness
Darkness to lightness,
Ruthlessness to forgiveness
Sadness to happiness,
Weaknesses to strengths
Illness to healthiness,
Weariness to willingness
Awkwardness to smoothness,

Selfishness to selflessness.

Your smile allows us to
Immediately take a while to rest
Efficiently do our very best,
Confidently stand on our two feet
Brightly achieve any tough feat
Bravely face our given fate,
Spontaneously increase our personal faith

Repeatedly seeing you with bated breath,
Patiently learn the longing of wait
Modestly have will power extremely great,

Definitely forget our last defeat
Truly have sensation we never felt
Completely succeed all our tests
Absolutely deserve all our gifts.

Abderrahmane Dakir


© 2015 Abderrahmane Dakir



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The most genuine smiles are done with the whole heart. Your heart does shine is this write. Bravo!


Posted 2 Years Ago


Abderrahmane Dakir

2 Years Ago

Thank you so much.
a great poem , very well written, so intense

well done

Posted 2 Years Ago


Abderrahmane Dakir

2 Years Ago

Thank you so much.
The Poem has great flow and your thoughts are very well expressed. I really enjoyed reading it.

Posted 2 Years Ago


Abderrahmane Dakir

2 Years Ago

Thank you so much.
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I find the rhyme easy to read with an easy flow. It brings positive outcome, that makes it a very well thought-out piece... well expressed!

Posted 2 Years Ago


Abderrahmane Dakir

2 Years Ago

Thank you so much.
Very nice poem and agreed it is very inspirational

Posted 2 Years Ago


Abderrahmane Dakir

2 Years Ago

Thank you so much.
Very inspirational, Abderrahmane. Just reading it makes me want to smile. Great job. Keep writing, brother. ;)

Posted 2 Years Ago


Abderrahmane Dakir

2 Years Ago

Thank you so much.
Nice poem... but to tell the truth I'm not much of a poem expert and I have no idea what to say... *embarrassed silence*

Posted 2 Years Ago


Abderrahmane Dakir

2 Years Ago

Thank you so much.
The theme and message is simple however told in a variety of ways, expressed intricately with amazing use of words. It has a beautiful flow and rolls easily off the tongue. As for criticism verses 2 and 3 are exceptionally well written and perfected. Verse 4 becomes a little unraveling but still very well written. The 1st verse for me holds all the problems, it is hard to grasp the flow, being the 1st it can be argued this is the most important as its the "attention grasp-er"

I can see this becoming a truly exceptional poem, the potential is there. Keep pushing it to perfection, settle for nothing less

Posted 2 Years Ago


Abderrahmane Dakir

2 Years Ago

Thank you so much.
this is a very nice poem. I love that it has so much emotion and it all comes from something so simple. its amazing what just a simple smile can do to a persons day.

Posted 2 Years Ago


Abderrahmane Dakir

2 Years Ago

Thank you so much.
Well, this is a piece brimming with "positivism", and the Smile that inspired these words of yours to shape into a poem had been obviously portrayed by a hyperbolic pen. It is true though that a hearty smile can sometimes make our day and help us get through whatever hardships that might be awaitening us on the midway less distressingly.

The colourfull vocab is there and the playing with opposites is fair. I do agree, however, with what Mr. Jack Galmitz suggested in his review. The use of more imagery would add spice to your poetry.

Thank you for sharing this melodic flow

Peace



Posted 2 Years Ago


Abderrahmane Dakir

2 Years Ago

Thank you so much.

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Added on April 30, 2015
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Abderrahmane Dakir
Abderrahmane Dakir

casablanca, Morocco



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