7 places to find a violin

A poem from camp. My personal favorite

1. In a coffin of golden velvet

Lies a wooden body.

But the body is not dead,

The heart is still alive.

Come, pick it up,

And reawaken its song.

 

2. Pale dancers are dancing on

A wooden floor.

But it is the dancers

That are creating the music.

Come with me,

And dance the night away.

 

3. Sitting in the cave

Is a lonely traveler.

But he has found a friend

To sing, to be with.

Come with me

And comfort the melodious man.

 

4. Green-brown statues

Are standing so still.

But now comes a wandering minstrel

And sits at their base.

Come, watch with me

How the statues come alive.

 

5. There is a shadowy and silent space

Where no sound rings.

But here comes a little bird

Its beautiful song flies.

Come and help me bring,

Light and music to a dark and lonely place.

 

6. A lost soul has been thrown

Into a gloomy pile.

But here comes the searching child

To find a hidden treasure.

Come, teach her with me

And soothe the restless soul

 

7. A gallant knight

Has defeated the dragon.

But inside the lair, there are no jewels,

Only a finely carved instrument.

Come, show him with me

The fantastic riches of a wooden violin

 

Author's Note

Any suggestions?

Reviews

As an ex-violinist, I enjoyed this. People often develop a connection to their instruments. Even though I was never very good on the violin, the satisfaction of playing and playing beautifully are all too familiar.

[Ecros Lathes]

Nice work I like it.

[SH]

Being a violinist myself, I was really touched by this poem. I feel a special connection to it.
Your imagery and metaphors are really lovely.

[Lucia]

Ohhh...a very intriguing title and really nice flow and format.
Just one suggesting, though I think it's a typo...
In section 4 - the third line says, "And sits are their base"
I think "are" should be "at" or something like that.
Hope I was helpful! Luved your poem! I definitely want to read more like this.

[Alaska Frost]

nope, no suggestions...it's perfect!!

[Encore]

That's a very lovely piece! You used an entirely different form with poetry, but you made it flow nicely.

Thank you for your submission!

[Christopher 'Windstorm'..]

great read thanks for sharing