This mothers tears

This mother's tears! A Poem by debileah My penknife grows weary!

This mother's tears, cannot be wiped dry!

No one can tell me, not to cry!

My loss is soul deep!

While my child has met with his eternal sleep?

How can this be?

For this I weep, but not just for me...

I weep for his sister's who loss is so great!

I weep for his extended family and friends!

I weep for the world and the man it has lost!

I weep! I mourn! I cry!

Inside I want to die!

Outside, I must go on and I must survive.

Thus, this is what he would want me to do.

So I write with pen in hand,

painting arid words on blank sheets of  paper...

my thoughts wandering, as my penknife grows weary.

My son, he was a writer you see...

a teller of stories, much better than me.

 

 

 

Reviews

[pinksnowboots]

This is so sad-it makes anyone feel the pain. If this is based on personal experience, I'm so sorry.

However, it could use a little bit of editing. Some of the exclamation points could be omitted so they have more impact when they are used. In this line, you could just use "sister" instead of "sister's."

"I weep for his sister's who loss is so great!"

This is my favorite line.

"painting arid words on blank sheets of paper..."

This is so sad-I feel your pain. I am so sorry if this is a personal experience.

[Jade Mayhew]

Oh my gosh, oh my gosh, oh my gosh!!! Please say that's a work of fictionnnnnn!!! :[[[[[[[

I can't even relate to the pain of losing a son. I'm SO SO SO sorry!!! :[[[