There you stood!

There was a knock upon my door tonight

I was just sitting here in the candlelight

 

Funny, I was just thinking about you

And there you stood in the moonlight

 

I bid you to come in and set a spell

Would you like a cup of tea

 

Spend some time and chat with me

Pull up a chair and sit beside me

 

Laugh like we use to do

How I long to listen to the stories

 

that only you can tell

Stay with me and keep me company

 

until the morning light...

 

Suddenly I awaken from this dream

I reach out for you with empty arms

 

These lonely tears streaming down my face

how I miss your sweet embrace

 

Such a sad anniversary

it's been a year ago today my son

 

God's angel's came down and took you away

How I wish you could have stayed...

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[Adam Jordan Turner]

This is absolutely beautiful, and so sad. But it's a good sad, a very healing sad, and very packed full of love. It did make me feel very warm. And I like the fact that although it's sad it's not negative, it could be so negative but it isn't at all, my favorite lines are "I bid you to come in and set a spell" and "God's angel's came down and took you away, How I wish you could have stayed..." the former is a perfect simile and creates great imagery. It says a lot about the boy. The latter is just a wonderful close, it keeps it positive, while still sad, but touching! Thank you for sharing!

[L.G. Knight]

I can't imagine loosing a child I had born, I had a miscarriage and that almost killed me loosing a child like you did probably would...

Your words really speak to the reader, reach down into the depths of their souls and pull out the feelings of greif and sadness, but also leave a sweet after tast on the palate of your heart because it is such a sweet poem, filled more with the love you had for your son than the aggony of loosing him...

It's stuctured so well and flows like a river it's graceful and elegent and just wonderfully put together and so very touching I couldn't not like it.... Very well done! Thanks for entering it in the "Versed in Ghosts" poetry contest!

~Frances~

[James Starnes]

I am a father of 8, single father of 6 living with me. I can't even imagine such pain as you have felt, but know I would only pray I could be so strong as you have through your writing. And through your writing you will remember, and see the beauty your child still brings to you, never lost, never forgotten but forever beside you smiling at the caring words you have written, seeing your pain, but wishing you joy I am sure. In life we lose people we love, I have lost many, not so close as you, but as a child I felt it strongly. I know they watch over me, are with me every moment of every day. I always hope that I honor them in words and deed as a caring parent and human being, I see those qualities in your love of writing, feel your pain in each word, each sentence. I would love to see a poem of joyous thoughts of your child in calibration of his life, not the passing into his new existence. Just know he is there, sitting beside you, an arm on your shoulder to comfort you, even if you can not feel it, he is there, not blaming, only loving as all children love there mommies and daddies forever.

[Wildfleour]

I am, again, so sorry. I am a teacher and I have lost 7 students in 10 years. Even for me, it is unbearable..

My thoughts are with you.
xxx

[Ralphy]

this is a such a warm piece although sad... the authors words rain on the audiences emotions. I can honestly say that it touches all parts of the soul. Nice write.

[Imperfection]

This is so sad...it's hard to go through it.

[April Child]

Touching and sad piece. Beautifully written.

[DeAn]

the hearts pain brings poetry to it's depths and yet it etches upon the screen the greatest love ever seen.

this was a clear cut poem of truth spoken so elequently and sadly it left tears in my eyes.

**hugs**