Touch That Thrills

Answer to a challenge to use a specific line from a William Wordsworth poem.

I wandered lonely as a cloud

Aloof, alone, concerned for self.

My actions rarely made me proud.

I spent much time upon the shelf,

Then came the day when I met you,

And first discerned that I was blue.

Your happy soul and radiant smile

Warmed my heart and blessed my world.

My daily chores no longer a trial,

A happy cloud, I danced and twirled.

Eyes opened, I began to see

And with others would agree.

My world has turned from blue and white, 

From worthless dull with shades of gray

To verdant green and colors bright.

I look forward, now, to each day,

To visual, aromatic treats,

To abundant blessings and to sweets.

I find that when I close my eyes

And contemplate my changing life,

I smile within and know the prize

Has been sharing with you... my wife;

And then my heart with pleasure fills,

For forty years, a touch that thrills.

Reviews

[Rick Puetter]

Dear Ppapaed,

This is a beautiful piece and touches me since I know the same sort of relationship with my wife of over 36 years (we've known each other for 44 years, since freshmen in High School--oh, I've just revealed our ages--my wife will kill me!).

I really love

"My world has turned from blue and white,
From worthless dull with shades of gray
To verdant green and colors bright.
I look forward, now, to each day,"

This is wonderful writing and I love the choice "verdant green"--very nice.

It's been a while since I've reviewed one of your pieces. When you have something you'd like me to review, send me some e-mail. I've had to turn off my read requests--I was getting buried.

Best regards, my friend. A very nice piece.

Rick

[Beccy]

How lovely this is. So romantic. My mum and Dad have been married now for forty two years, and this poem perfectly describes what has always been a very loving relationship.



Beccy.

[Zahra]

This is really very well penned. Thanks for sharing

[MoriartyMesa]

Mr. Wordswoth had a nice sense of phrase, but this felt more of Johnson, interpretation of W.W., Oxford Book of English 1942 if not I'm mistaken? A lost leader comes to mind.



I enjoyed it.

[Antoñyo]

I have a saying; The right person FOR you ... brings out the best IN you
This piece is that saying spelled out in beautiful vivid living color!
Wonderful reading

Thanks for sharing!

[[untitled]]

http://poeticvoice.ning.com/

We are an online writing community that provides writers with the feedback, motivation, and advice needed to achieve their writing goals.The Poetic Voice Community is fast and easy to join, and you will not get lost in it's easy maneuvering features. We here at Poetic Voice also hope to grow as a community of friends. Our intention, and wish is to learn and share with others. Basically we believe an open mind, and heart can promote growth. We hope to gain an understanding that can stretch and reach around the world.

[TL Boehm]

Oh wow. this one brought a tear to my eye. A beautiful love poem and awesome use of the specific line. I've missed reading you.