LOVE IN A SENSE!

Sometimes when in love we take things for granted,
Those mean words under our breaths we have chanted.
Like oh I just wish he would stop his whinning and complaining,
Or oh I wish she would listen, im tired of explaining.

What if all of a sudden you went deaf and you couldn't hear,
your partners lips are moving, but the words are not quite clear.
You could no longer hear the sound of there sweet sweet voice,
They try to learn sign language for you now, thats the only choice.

Sometimes we hate our partners breath, because of the foods they eat,
So sometimes we look for ways out of kissing them, we retreat.
Sometimes we hate that certain perfume, that they simply addore,
but its the good smells to, that we take for granted and sometimes ignore.

What if you lost your sense of smell, you couldn't smell your lover again,
Not being able to smell the things that remind you of them, would drive you insane.
Even the smells you hated, you wish you could now inhale,
but your nose wont smell anything, it continues to fail.

Sometimes we look at our partners and we hate what they wear,
or what about that horrible way they tend to do up there hair.
Maybe your partner put on a little bit of extra weight,
Suddenly in your eyes they no longer look so great.

What if you went blind and suddenly your world went black,
you would no longer think about the things your partner lacked.
Suddenly you would kill to see there face or messy head of hair,
But you can no longer see a thing, your vision impaired.

So just think about these senses that you take for granted everyday,
not just when it comes to love, but with everything in everyway.
Next time think about the things you do and the things you say,
Because unfortunetly for some people there world is painted a dark grey.

Reviews

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

Whoa, this is well written and it makes the reader think it through, just as, well. I never been in love, well not ideally lol, but I thought about it and it's not limited to that type of romantic love. It can be taken in more than one way, and that's what I like about this the most. Tyfs this poem!

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Thankz for another great review :) your to kind :) glad you liked it

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

You're most welcome :)

[cycy]

thissss...wow, got me thinking about all the things i take for granted. it is really a beautiful reminder, thanks cimmy. sorry late reviews all round. have been away like forever

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

I did miss ya. And your wonderful reviews. Thank you for them they mean allot. Especially coming from you.

[Suhd]

Couldn't agree more with this poem. It's so original and amazing. Great piece of art :)

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Thank you so much :)

[Wajiha Nayeem]

whoaaa....this made me cry i swear.
beautiful...

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Thank you so much :)

[Wajiha Nayeem]

that's my pleasure cimmone.

[Paul]

I could feel the emotion put into writing this poem. Well done! I enjoyed reading this.

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Thank you :)

[tanmay7551]

Taking things granted about your partner when in love... that's something new you have come up with. Good work.

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Tjanks for your review :) yeah it not just anything either. We take for granted the simple things that come naturally. But what if oneday we lost these things... life would never be the same aeee

[Happy hours]

only love...nothing else matters...
Amazing! nicely penned :)

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Thank you :)

[dan]

cimmy, I just reviewed a similar piece by Dante. I believe that in every love relationship there are rough patches to navigate. Annoyance and irritation by one's partner is commonplace and must be traversed, but with patience and healing thought this can be achieved.
Your wordplay describing such annoyances is very good, artfully done. Readers involved in a loving relationship will be given much food for thought, lessons to contemplate. I believe this is your finest piece that I have read. My compliments! take care...dan

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

That means allot that you think this is my best work, means my writing is only continuing to improve.
Thank you so much for your lovely review Dan :)

[barleygirl]

First off, your word crafting & rhymes work very well & give this a playful rhythm as we read . . . it's not coming off like a harsh rebuke, but reminding people in good humor using slight exaggeration that's very realistic & teachable. I love your creative mind, thinking to connect love to the senses this way . . . I'm constantly suggesting to other writers to use the senses more in their writing. This is the poster child for doing that. Finally, this is my favorite theme to write about these days, as I watch people destroy each other over stupid meaningless stuff, while seemingly forgetting the simple pleasures of friendship & love! It can never be said too many times & you've found a very imaginative way to say it well.

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

I'm glad someone finally wrote about the subject you where looking for.
I honestly don't know how I thought of this topic, I guess it just came to me :)
Thank you for another wonderful review.
I honestly love reading your reviews.

[Manu]

Nice write cimmy :-)
Most of your writes contain human relations and emotions. They always have some good thoughts in it.
It is always a pleasure to read them.
Thanks for sharing.

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Thank you for the review Gorthi :)