Winter Eyes

Inspired by a recent snowstorm in Atlanta.

sestranded

on iceway 85

enveloped on all sides

multitudinous 

miles

of pathways ahead

of which none 

can be traveled

the crystal spears

begin to rocket

downward, in rhythm

clinkulating

slicing through glass

and grey framework...

I take shelter

in my shielded

cell, as the horns

blast across

the viaduct,

bouncing off of

flagstone and

into

nothingness.

and in that moment

I retreat

into the

silent house

within, where

a candle dimly

coruscates,

pirouetting through

the dark

illuminating hallways

inside the

breathing castle.

the lifebeats

are boundless

moving invisibly

in door-halls

with ancient keys

not of gold or silver,

but those that

can't be held

by human hands.

they cannot see beyond

the window,

but

my vehicle

begins to move

among the petroleum

sea.

we swim forward

like scorpionfish

crushing one another

yet the lantern

inside still

is lit,

and burns

in wintry hail,

its firetips

carrying

my body

inexhaustibly

through

time.

Author's Note

The word "sestranded" in the first line was originally a typo, but I liked the way it sounded. Is the poem missing anything? Feel free to comment or critique.

Reviews

[Robbie~xoxo~]

WOW!!! What an imagination!...and your brilliant diction blows me away!

Not only is this (candle) lit with whimsical wonderings of an adventurous fairy tale, but also weaves within the bone crushing ice storm...

Excellent write! :)

[Eric Pudalov]

Thank you so much, Robbie!! I appreciate any feedback - and wow, I don't think anyone's said I have "brilliant diction" before! I definitely think in fairy tale terms a lot.

[Robbie~xoxo~]

Well it's true... you are absolutely clever with your diction...
I like that you have an imagination so pure!... It's what makes this unique! Well thought out... NICELY DONE!

[Eric Pudalov]

Thanks again!! I've started reading more of your work too, and when I have the time, I'll write out some more thoroughly detailed reviews. I'm very much inspired by the work of other poets as well.

[Robbie~xoxo~]

That's awesome, thank you!... cheers to Poetry, my friend! :)

[Eric Pudalov]

Cheers! I just gave you my first "detailed review." Hope you like it...don't worry, it's positive!

[Robbie~xoxo~]

I loved it! Thank you!
Read my response... it's quite interesting... ;D

[Eric Pudalov]

Thank you, I did!

[Robbie~xoxo~]

(he he) :))