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the newspaper print

faded in the flood,

tears falling through the roof

yesterday's headlines

were about us, 

about love

 

today as the rain pelts the tiles

i think of you, 

and drop towels on the carpet

soaking up as much memory

as allowed,

 

before the rainbow accents the sky

and i find a long vowel

in the word, "missing"

two of them

just like there were two of us

 

but now just drips from the ceiling

a life that needs repairs

and a hope love insurance

will cover the damages,

 

thank God the classified section

stayed dry

even if i couldn't.

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

12/28/15

Reviews

[Diana]

"thank God the classified section stayed dry even if I couldn't- I sense something hidden here, maybe wanting to keep "classified" some of the details of this hurt. I feel the loss in your words. This piece really spoke to me tonight.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Diana.

j.

[iand63]

We all need to stand in the rain sometimes. But in the words of Eric Draven "It can't rain all the time" ;) . Enjoyed the "It is what it is" quality of this piece Jacob.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, iand63...
j.

[Alfred Kukitz]

I could see you standing on the roof, the rescue boat taking her away, while the waters engulf the soul of a poet. I'm offering a pleased life jacket for your soul. Float on my friend.

Happy New Year!

Al

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Al..

happy new year!

j.

[Brittany Bostic]

This is one of my favorite of your poems. Someone looking back on what happened and being grateful. It could be simple but somehow you make it so beautifully complex.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Brittany...

j.

[jesserose99]

I love the reflection that goes on in this piece. the fact that the outside is the inside. obvious pain throughout but a lightness and a sense of humor about it. lovely to read your poetry...as I said in another comment...very inspiring to a poet always learning.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

you are very kind in your words, jesserose...

j.

[A hare off]

Really great Jacob. Yesterday's headlines survived the flood even if the relationship didn't.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, A hare...
j.

[Cherry]

This is remarkable writing. I was affected most by the missing vowel but the whole poem shows a kind of eclectic unity. you show the marks of an accomplished poet. TFS.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Cherry...

j.

[andrew mitchell]

The imagery is perfect as is the metaphor of love lost . The title clever! I wonder on the insurance though!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

medicare doesn't cover it very well...:)))

thank you, andrew...

j.

[W R Stowe]

Very touching Jacob reminiscing of past love,funny thing about love it can bring us much joy or much pain,Even though painful I still cherish the love that brought joy through the pouring tears
Great write as always

Bill

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Bill...

j.

[W R Stowe]

You're quite welcome Jacob

Bill

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Excellent imagery and clever metaphor. This is your standard :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, lynn.

j.