intervals of movement

intervals of movement

 

 

 

sifting fingers through your wispy locks

arrested my interest

 

the scent of your eyes

incited a riot in my heart

a mob of emotions

protesting,

 

each time

we stopped Marching

to the beat

of our love.

 

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

2/4/16

Reviews

[redzone]

I got here too late Jacob, all my insights have already been insightfully stated!!! damn... but I do want to register a "protest" and have a demand to go with it - more Jacob, more heart beats and "arresting" interests, more fingers in "wispy locks".... okay, i'm old and getting tired of marching so I am now going to wage a sit-in... ;0)

Jacob your poetry always reflect your creative mind (and heart)!!!

redzone

[jacob erin-cilberto]

ha ha...thank you, Curt...appreciate your words and the smile this morning...

j.

[David Scott]

The poem reads of momentum without actually saying it. It reads of inevitability when a catalyst meets a base and very thing tumbles to the balance of a natural equation.
Musical poetry!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

you are so spot on with your philosophies in your reviews...thank you, David.
j.

[WittyWonka]

You have me thinking about the pauses between the movements. Very romantic.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Witty...appreciate your words.
j.

[WittyWonka]

You are welcome, Jacon

[θεά]

Effective piece of writing. Particularly appreciate the way you've broken the phrases to deliver an impact, a tempo of strength at each break.

Thanks for sharing. As always, reading it has been a pleasure.
Best,
M.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your very kind words, Mallika...

j.

[Carolynn]

Beautiful metaphor and Lydia wrote the perfect review so I can only second what she said.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Carolynn.

j.

[Lydia Shutter]

Pheromones...."the scent of your eyes"....I believe chemistry between two people has a lot to do with touch and smell. When the heart races, it's hard to pay attention to that protesting mob. Splendid metaphor. Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i like your clever insights...and yes, hard to pay attention.

thank you,
j.

[Fabian G. Franklin]

"the scent of your eyes"...What an interesting metaphor...scents being some of our most powerful memory/sensory tools...a perfume or a spice can linger in our minds for years on end. One must wonder if the lady in question halts to protest or surrender. But in case of the former point, "The lady doth protest too much methinks" Always a pleasure to read your offerings Jacob.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your insightful words, Fabian...i really appreciate your visits.

j.

[Mary Helda]

Goodness!!!!!!! a very powerful and lovely romantic poem sir.....absolutely beautiful

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Mary

j.

[Mary Helda]

you are welcome

[Jimmy Yetts]

Those inner demonstrations can get out of hand.
Poignant, metaphorical and eloquent, Professor J.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Jimmy,
j.

[andrew mitchell]

Romantic write jacob of impeccable style that can only impress!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, andrew..

j.