Hunt

Hunt

 

 

your brown eyes

penetrate my dreams

the stare through the underbrush

of my convictions

i feel the us that could be

 

knowing you will stay confined to your own woods

and that "woulds" between us will never be my shade

 

the sun will shine vacantly

and you will be that vision

that runs, when i wake,

like a deer that anticipates the shot

 

although my bullets would be love

and the waking 

 

if in each other's arms

could be the trophy...

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

12/19/16

Reviews

[D Connolly]

this love is so elusive! Maybe that is what draws you to it. The prey that is easily caught might not be as fun for you. But the prey fears capture for their own reasons; maybe being devoured isn't on their list of "fun things to do today". The trophy to the hunter is a head on the wall to the prey

[jacob erin-cilberto]

very insightful review, D.
thank you for your words.

j.

[...]

The hunt, the mystery is enchanting, the learning and revealing of ones self is definitely exciting...But I think when you reach that destination and a relationship blooms...love... that's the ultimate prize. Awesome metaphor Jacob. Starz x

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Starzy....

j.

[Tony Jordan]

Coyness and shyness can be so entrancing. It makes us think of mystery, the unknown...is there anything as alluring?
It's a great bow that you have stringed j.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Tony.

j.

[Lydia Shutter]

Trying to get someone to notice you....to start a relationship with you...can be thrilling, but the real thrill of it starts when the relationship starts if you ask me. Yes, the prize is being in that person's arms. I liked the metaphor. You don't write in the romantic realm often, but you do it so well. Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Lydi....


j.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

We always hope catching love is as exciting as looking for it.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, we do, Dale..
thank you for your words

j.

[Ana Papaya]

Most hunt for the thrill of catching the prize, but the prize here is something more meaningful. To be in one another's arms, in love. I suppose it could mean a one night fling but my romantic heart reads it as a love poem. The desire to catch the ultimate prize ~ love.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

you are so perceptive, Ana...

thank you for your visit and words,

j.

[Ana Papaya]

You're welcome. Happy Holidays Jacob!

[andrew mitchell]

It's all about the hunt, a trophy is but a trophy, it's nice and stable but the chase lies excitement,the battle of wits.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, it is about the chase isn't it....i remember when i was an adolescent...that was true especially then.

j.

[Jimmy Yetts]

Been my experience that once a trophy is won, the hunter begins scanning the woods for another "dear" to bring down. We want what we don't have; we eventually tire of what we do.
While people are "in love," they cannot see reality; they see only the outward projection of what their own emotions have created to pique their interest, spice up their lives and/or meet an as of yet unmet need.
Sorry for the cynicism.
"Hunt" can only be regarded as exceptional, Jacob.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

hey you are talking to the master of cynicism...

my many years on this earth have taught me that...

very insightful response...and love the play on "dear"---

thank you for your kind words...

j.

[Miss Sharon]

Perfection as per your forte Jacob! Love the play on words and the similie and metaphor which you do so well. Always a joy to read your words! ~Sharon

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Sharon.

j.

[Paul Bell]

This is great Jacob. The woman you can't have. But would like. Mysterious. Does she belong to another.
Is she free to hunt.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Paul...appreciate your review...and just take from it what you will...

j.