strike

strike

A Poem by jacob erin-cilberto

strike

 

 

sift the insightful waters

of stinging tears,

and then, ripples of penitence

evaporate the will

 

and love becomes a large mouth bass

under the glass

waiting to strike the heart

that is as unaware

as a surface lure

strolling along the cheek of sadness.

 

 

erin-cilberto

9/6/17


© 2017 jacob erin-cilberto



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Too deep for me--though I have, more than once, had "ripples of penitence" evaporate my will.
Second stanza: Incredibly creative metaphor.
High-level work, Jacob!

Posted 3 Months Ago


Indeed tears of regret drive us into the blackness where we are left vulnerable to any hope at all.
This is a starkly emotional piece full of deep descriptions and words that strike chords amany.

Posted 3 Months Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

3 Months Ago

thank you for your words, John.
j.

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jacob erin-cilberto
jacob erin-cilberto

Carbondale, IL



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Originally from Bronx, NY, I live in Carbondale, Illinois...teach English at two community colleges and have been writing and publishing poetry since 1970. Friending works two ways. If we have had .. more..

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