broken toy

Was I just an empty spot on a shelf?
Another item you needed to complete yourself.

A toy you wanted so bad.
Another piece of trash you had to have.

Now that you played with me.
Did l lose that shine you used to see?

Thrown in a box with the rest.
With all the things you used to love best.

Was I even a treasured token?
Or am I now something you just see broken.

Reviews

[C. Rose]

Poor broken toy :)
Again a very easy to relate to topic.
I enjoy the natural voice you put into your poems. The clear and heart-tugging topics - that are NOT cliche.

Missing a space between "token" and "."

Consider using a variety of punctuation. "?" at the end of a question and "-" at the end of an incomplete idea.

[Barbara Walker]

Very different to read something from a toy's pov. Very creative, great syntax and rhymes!

[fitz Roberts]

Thank you for the review and the read

[Matching Socks]

Enjoyed this one Skye. Something we can all relate to, being treated as if we're objects.
Well done.

[yuki]

very very emotional you can tell how the toy feels nicely done

[gavinmichaels]

I love the concept behind this poem. The raw emotion after feeling used is very well portrayed. Once again FitZ good work

[jacob erin-cilberto]

someone else would look into that box in the attic and find something very worthwhile...there are always others...those who will appreciate and fix up the toys.

jacob

[fitz Roberts]

Lmao yah your right thanx for the read

[fitz Roberts]

Thanx for all the help rose.when it comes to poetry I just write what comes to mind thanx im glad I'm not cliche lol if j become so let me know please.than for helping me grow rose

[Chris]

Hell of a feeling to wake up to... and the day you realize IT ...yeah, hell of a feeling.

[Muse]

Used goods. Funny how even people can be abused in such a way. But it's true. We give so much of ourselves sometimes, and once the fun is over, you get sucked dry by all the leaches.