COLLECTION OF HAIKU I

Hai - ai - kuu ...

DEVOID OF REASON

Cunning rancid minds -
Cesspools of irrational thought
spreading disease

NIGHTMARES

Heartbreaking malaise -
You’re the needle in my eye
lacerating dreams

BURNING OUT

Cimmerian breath -
Luminous side of life burns
unavoidably

DESIRE

Amorous ember -
Swallow you to warm my heart
ignite my passion

Author's Note

I thought I'd post my Haiku in fours. Posting them one by one seems like I'm cheating the reader. I want to give you your money's worth so to speak :)

First Haiku is a modern one with 5-8-4. All the others are 5-7-5.
Tell me which one you like the most, because I think I will post that one on its own.

TY

Reviews

[VelvetRosetta]

I really like these!

Swallow you to warm my heart...Love it!

[Robin]

"Nightmares" is my favorite , "Desire" is probably the most "traditional" in form as '"amourous ember" has a seasonal refernce , and especially if "warm my "was exchanged with "my cold" to supply the cutting word ...

Haiku are fun

[Crowley]

All superb...but my fave is Burning out, hands down. Nice work my friend.

[Tim]

First two are a little harsh, liked the last two. Nice job.

[Snapdragon]

I love all four of them but especially the first. I think it's the "cesspool of irrational thought" that grabbed me. Good jib. I love haiku.

[Abdul Aziz]

Great. You've used some strong vocabulary in this one, and it pays off. I'm sorry I'm unable to comment more, as I'm not really a fan of haikus.

[OkieWonKenokie]

I like all 4 of them. I love "Desire" the most though. They're all great. Can't wait to read some more from you.

[Fran Marie]

Nice set of the 4, I like them all with the third being my fave

the 2 nd line in the first one has an 8 syllable count
Cesspools of irrational thought

Perhaps you might opt to replace the word >>cesspools

>>>like drains or drop the cess and just use pools~

at any rate a well crafted collection indeed...nicely DonE!

[Linda Marie Van Tassell]

I love the third and fourth haikus the best. The third feels more ethereal to me, while the fourth indeed feels like an amorous ember.

Linda Marie

[FeliciaS (Poetic Prince..]

AWESOME