Love Is Dangerous

My first haiku.

A gun to my head,
Keep by his side? I will die,
Move on? Death again.

Author's Note

Fiction.

Reviews

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Love the dualism here, Zoe.

What a choice! To stay or go, knowing that taking either path will lead to a death of some sort; either stay and risk a death at violent hands by an abusive person or leave and risk the death of the relationship. Very clever. And a perfect haiku form!

An excellent first attempt. Well Done!

[Zoya]

Thank you so very much, Doodley! That was a perfect interpretation. Glad you liked it.

[Pragati Chaudhary]

Well, That was utterly dangerous and beautiful at the same time

[Zoya]

Thank you for your time and review!

[Ted Kniffen]

A good haiku, Zoe. The ying and yang of love. I would say I like that you are experimenting with different poetic forms. That's how you grow. For a first attempt this is good.

[Zoya]

Thank you very much, Ted! Means a lot.

[Avia]

Well done. It's so short, but says so much. Keep it up Zoe.

[Zoya]

Thank you much, Avia!

[wordman]

what a situation to be placed in damn if you do ! and damn if you don`t

[Zoya]

Thank you, wordman! I appreciate it.

[Ethan Thompson]

Thrilling. I love the imagery

[Zoya]

Thanks much for your time and review. Appreciated!

[Sami Khalil]

Cleverly written and executed. A good one.

[Zoya]

Thank you. I really appreciate it!

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome.

[Suhd]

I like the poem but I disagree with the idea of love presented here.

[Zoya]

I understand. I'm gonna change the title. It doesn't fit well. Thank you for reading!

[Suhd]

Pleasure !

[pia]

this was well written
and good for your first haiku !!

[Zoya]

Thank you, Pia! I appreciate your comment

[Najam Us Saher]

Good attempt. I want to say that this is not a haiku.
It consists of 5 7 5 syllables.
First line has 7
Second 13
Third 7
It seems that modern poets are not following that rule, so I think it is okay. To a conclusion, I wouldn't call this a perfect haiku.
Don't let my words discourage you, I know I am being a bit harsh, I know that you are very talented and that I why I want you to know about the format of a haiku.

[Zoya]

Uh-oh, I get it. Thank you much for telling me about it. Ill correct it and post it again!

[Najam Us Saher]

Now it is perfect. Good job.

[Zoya]

Thank you!

[Abraham George]

Zoe no need to worry. I always welcome comments like this to correct our mistakes. Most of the people hear won't give true review . So appreciate it

Najam i like your attitude.

[Najam Us Saher]

You make me smile😊

[Zoya]

I always appreciate true reviews :)

[Abraham George]

@ Najam . What makes you smile. I am darn serious.

[Najam Us Saher]

The fact that you like my attitude, I thought my words would hurt Zoe.

[Zoya]

Be assured, they did not. Im just glad you told me about it!

[Najam Us Saher]

Anytime, Zoe. Only because I believe that you have immense talent I felt like telling you to make you perfect with the form. ☺
I am happy that you took my words in a positive way :)

[Zoya]

Thank you again, Najam, for your read and review. I truly appreciate it :)

[Najam Us Saher]

You are most welcome :)