Unwind

Another piece for the once sentance contest.

I unwind, spinning faster and faster, spiraling towards my own destruction as I fall apart. 

Author's Note

So, what do you think. I had to write a sentance about anything.

Reviews

[DeliriousCerises]

I agree with Archia, when I read this at first it seemed like something very bright, happy, and innocent. Like relaxing, and reverting back to whimsy, and then it turns dark very quickly, as if to say, "Gotcha!" I'm not sure if that's what you were going for, but I liked that unexpected feeling created within one sentence. Well done.

[Isabelle Faye]

Yes it was intended. I'm glad you like it. I wanted to represent how your life can fall to pieces around you so quickly and how you're pulled along by it, falling deeper and deeper into it's snare, spinning faster ad faster towards your own destruction.

[Archia]

I love how for me when I hear unwind I immediately think of freedom, but it wasn't like that here, it was different, and I really enjoyed that. Nice job.

[None]

I like this a lot. I did this exercise once for a writing prompt. Honest;y, the sentence can go on and on with commas. I love how the sentence appears to wrap inwards upon itself until the "period" and it is gone. I wonder what would happen if you made the sentence a spiral?

[Isabelle Faye]

That would be interesting...I don't know how to though.

[None]

Use the tab button and do a wide to narrowing zig zag.