Boney Knees

Boney Knees

A Poem by Rufio The Jedi

Your thoughts are a field

Where my boney knees stumble

Bare foot

Your body

Is the pit

Of a plum

Swaying on a branch

Where the tips of my toes can’t reach

Inside my chest

There is a beautiful city lying in ruins

With a thousand tiny men

With a thousand tiny bricks

Working

Day

And night

Day

And night

Not knowing when to return

Or who to return to

In this field

I am a lonely dandelion

That tongue kisses the dirt

And whispers

Sweet whispers

I think you’re almost beautiful

Yet your lips

Touch me like the wind

And I am the naïve seeds

That can not stand their ground

For I will always

Find my boney knees stumbling

Barefoot

 


© 2009 Rufio The Jedi



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Epic...
Very subtle and a complete signature of your style!

'I am a lonely dandelion'
'That tongue kisses the dirt'
'And whispers'
'Sweet whispers'

Magnificent....of all the work you find around...
your's simply leaps off this screen giving life to what is written.

-shivers me-

-akash-



Posted 8 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.




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Amazing.
My favorite:
"I am a lonely dandelion


That tongue kisses the dirt


And whispers


Sweet whispers


I think you're almost beautiful"

Remarkable imagery. Very moving and extremely well-written. Everything I've read of yours seems to be thoughtful and poignant.


Posted 8 Years Ago


This is a every thought provoking poem i injoyed the read and the picture that you painted with your words. Great read

Posted 8 Years Ago


amazing. all the words just flowed together. it is beautifuly written and you have a unique writing style. you r a terific writer, and i look forward to reading more of your work.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I like your style! And I'm a little jealous that I can't write as conventionally poetic as you can. Very thought provoking and you use original metaphors that I could only dream of conjuring up! The people below used a few moments that I would've highlighted, but in essence, it was a complete write! Great poem!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I am in AWE...I enjoyed this time I spent imagining the woman who would compel you to write so lovingly! I am a romantic by nature and love and admiration for other then oneself is always dear to me...

Sweet whispers
I think you're almost beautiful
Yet your lips
Touch me like the wind
And I am the nave seeds
That can not stand their ground
For I will always
Find my boney knees stumbling
Barefoot

I fell for this head over heels and rejoicing wondered how this woman must feel...

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

You have a beautiful way with words...
Amazing metaphor!

"In this field
I am a lonely dandelion
That tongue kisses the dirt"

Love it

Lynda


Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I'm not sure all of the short lines work; some of them seem to be short simply to be short, as opposed to having a purpose. That being said, the piece as a whole is really very, very nicely done. It's charming and winsome, and it purveys the notion of being awkward or slightly inadequate in the face of the object of one's desire very effectively. A very strong piece of work.

Posted 8 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

I stumbled on these words. When you first meet the work of someone new, you never know what to expect. It didn't take me long to catch up with you, brother poet. This is some fine, fine work. Just the kind of work I like to share with others.

I'll be back. To read you again. Glad to have you here among us.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Your metaphors have grown quite powerful my friend. I had an internal hurricane destroy and level my inner house on Saturday, but with friends and will power, had a foundation built back by the next morning. Imagery is awesome here too. You're turning into a true poet, sir! Congrats on the find piece of writing.

Travis

Posted 8 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Okay, this is going in my favorites. :)

Also, i am in love with the line "i think you're almost beautiful."

Posted 8 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.


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