Ode to Soccer

Yet another revived ode from 7th grade English.

WHACK

My foot collides with the ball.

I'm sure that I hit it straight towards

My teammate.

She dribbles up the field,

Passing back

And

Forth,

As I watch,

Longingly,

From the other end of the field.

Standing in defense

Like a bird,

Who is trapped in a

Cage,

Wishing to roam

Freely

From her prison.

An eruption of cheers,

We have scored.

Coach calls us in,

I'm switched to offense,

It's my time to shine.

The enemy steps up,

Cocky,

Showing off their size.

We are lean, and ready to win.

The whistle blows,

The battle has begun.

Immediately

I attack the ball

And run forward

Passing back and forth.

We act as

One,

A pack of wolves

Protecting our

Prey from the enemy,

Ready to

Shoot the

Colorblind ball

Into the

Jaws of victory.

The goalie snarls,

Then turns to my partner in this

Lethal dance.

An eon away, yet in a second

Passed to me, straight to me,

And,

With my last effort,

I kick the ball.

Another eruption of cheers, followed

Closely by a whistle.

We have scored.

We

Have

Won.

Author's Note

Constructive criticism is appreciated.

Reviews

[Ryan]

I really enjoyed this poem. I was entertained and liked the imagery.

[Cassey]

i loved this you are a great writer ,i wish you had more reveiws because everyone should see this

[Daydreamer54]

I love how u starte4d with an onomotapia and I love the personification and how poetic everything sounded! There such vivid imagery in this piece, reat job!
P.S- I like soccer too! :)