What I Need

Too aggressive?

A mark on the face of forever would surely fade when you forget the heat of my presence

I stack words like boxes, and store them for inspection but the pages get moldy

I long to paint pictures that change a man's span and depth to more like that of a woman

A slap in the face is easier to take when it is dealt with compassion and admiration

Are you the one who whispers such sweet desires to the wind? 

Are you the one who provides a glimpse into lusts cosmos?

Are you the one who runs and hides when I come calling?

On the inside you blaze and recede, heart and soul a pile of worthless slag

I took what was mine once and my feet became tangled in the prophecy

I tripped and never stopped falling until last week, a look in the mirror hastens

With rock solid footing I call out her name and pull her to my loins, aching

And the magic of the coupling begs and swirls to a tune of sweet redemption

Are you the one who cracks a mans spine to rebuild?

Are you the one who programs with fingers that grip?

Are you the one who drains my contempt with a stroke?

On the inside you stoke the embers with breath that smells like sex

My path is clear and your intentions are understated

Can you please tell me your desire or stir the winds on another plane

I am busy taking what I need

Reviews

[Amada]

Most satisfying poem I have ever read on Writerscafe, though my vocabulary is not rich like most of members are, but this poem pushed me to write a review.
In last, it's fantastic sir, keep writing.

[Crowley]

Thank you kindly, I appreciate the review!!!

[Maxwell Ryder]

not sure what you mean about men having depth and span. men are poets and thinkers, and we were always so - even artists.

[Crowley]

I agree, it was a comment about changing those that do not have that capability, or do not want to foster that capability, there are plenty of those as well. Thanks for the read and the review, I really appreciate it!!

[Maxwell Ryder]

very true. how can we get people to love art, that aren't artsy? artistic themselves. still trying to get my wife to understand my writing after all these years. oh well. thanks, Crowley

[¿]

Am with you and in your squad...
Seeking what we need never indicates our selfishness...
Keep up the busy work....and do take some rest ever if you feel like...
Thanks for sharing this one dear friend...Almighty's grace be upon you :)

[Crowley]

Thanks Girl!!!! Great to hear from you!!! Thanks so much for the review, hope you are well!

[¿]

All is getting well with the passing time!
Wish you a happy day and you're welcome :)

[Onlyme]

Powerful thought provoking words here Crowley. To stop you in your tracks and make you think. And take on board. Amazing write. Thanks for sharing.

[Crowley]

Thanks Dawn, hope you are well and that you have a fantastic weekend!!!

[Onlyme]

Not to bad Crowley. Hope all is well your end.

[Chris Shaw]

Some fine and thought provoking lines in this read. There will always be givers and takers. The takers aren:t always of the male persuasion. Takers are selfish, thinking only of themselves and what they can get out of a situation. Givers are far more considerate of the needs of others. I have to say I have seen an increase over recent years in the number of female takers. I wonder why that is? Are women becoming more aggressive?

Chris

[Crowley]

Maybe just more comfortable at navigating life without the arrogance of the male persuasion putting a stop to it. thanks Christine, nice to see you !!!

[angel]

Are you the one who cracks a mans spine to rebuild?
Are you the one who programs with fingers that grip?
Are you the one who drains my contempt with a stroke?

Those are some great words, man. Says so much, so indirectly, yet hits the mark unfailingly.
Great work, Crowley!

[Crowley]

thanks Angel!!! I appreciate the review and the visit!

[Lorry]

I thnkyou hit the nail(s) on the head with the difference between mars and venus, compassion and want. Women have both, men have one, and even then, part of us (we all know which part) sees the lines blur between want, need and to an extent, our needs and want are selfish. (sorry guys, I know im letting the team down.)
On the plus side though, this is not a judgement of you, but a judgement of my own warped and twisted male brain, and where it took your words. It's why guys dont go to clairvoyants, no chance we will let anyone open up that pandoras box :)

[Crowley]

It would be quite the catastrophe!!! Lol...thanks for the amazing review, I really appreciate it.

[Neville]

These words are gonna make you famous, you bad boy, b*****d brother, friend and poet.. I need you to quit writing and take up some dangerous sport or something.. but in the meantime, I am compelled to salute ya.. Neville

[Crowley]

Ha! Yeah, dangerous sports are behind me unless that means more than three vodkas on o Friday night!Thanks man!!!

[Neville]

cheers.. have a darn good un... N

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

Is there a point where your spirit is not aggressive? I think the value is misplaced between want and need...for one is expected and the other desired. The answers lie before the the questions...already answered. Her hand cups the warm heat of desired servitude and balances it out with a forehead kiss...Im busy giving ....so I can take what I want....

[Crowley]

Lol...I'm hopeless.

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

Never Cee, never!