Just an aftertaste....................

You stopped me at the first hello, an

 

older and charming handsome fellow

 

we quickly went from friends to lovers

 

I began to slaver for something more

 

I wanted to extinguish you, tasting

 

your salty skin, igniting a craving within

 

I need more to satisfy this palate, your

 

smell of blood sweet like punch, so I

 

pursue my first innocent lick and bite

 

only to get you stuck between my teeth

 

breaking fingers and splintering bones

 

I try to savor your affection in my mouth, but

 

what was once a confection has turned bitter

 

instead I had to swallow you down whole

 

bloated now from the weight of your soul.

Author's Note

Reviews

[MoriartyMesa]

Well slap my a*s call me Charlie and tell me to see Wonka bars. The start gave me the impression the end would not be as harsh. But I loved it, the entire flow could have been someone's thoughts when lying in bed and having the ever important moment of clarity.

[Dream Weaver]

Scary sensually good! ;)

[kevluvtory]

Changes from what is perceived to reality can complicate yet the desire to indulge always throws caution to the wind

[argentum lumen]

This was vivid and just flat out awesome if a little ambiguous. Well done.

[joshua deathdealer]

wow This is awesome Muse. Excellent work.

[light and ashes]

So beautiful "I try to savor your affection in my mouth, but what was once a confection has turned bitter instead I had to swall you down whole bloated now from the weight of your soul."

[solo2be]

Wow amazing write, very dark sensous. Had me hooked from beginning to end.

[Ladysue]

great title and wow that last two lines are tremendous...a very good write...

[KimLove "The Beautiful ..]

Muse, your muse was really working overtime tonight. This was just spectacular, I am at a loss for words here. Seriously the imagination, the emotions, the sensual feel. The words just all fit so well together, the ink from your pen and your muse made magic tonight. This has to be one of my favorites, it's just so different that I have to love it. I am honored to be the first to review it and read it. This one I will save and read again and again...xo

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

Wicked Muse..........for some reason the toughness of trying to eat deer meat from a much older deer came to mind.........you can kick me later. A vampire poem perhaps or one who tried to date a much older man and found the result revolting.