A shattered heart

A shattered heart

A Poem by InkSlinger

Praying in sleep’s last lucid nod

she lays down her heart to the night

drifting off into a hopeful dream

having long given up loves endless fight


Her only escape on the wings of change,

away from the world she knew

beating fervently, offered no flight

drifting solemnly, a sadness true


He wishes on stars

shooting about the night sky

in fields of long tall grass

where often, his dreams would die


Shattered hearts like puzzles

every piece, a place of its own

whispered promises meant so little

when she never returned home


Together a journey, they wander

unable to find love within

like soldiers marching to off a war

they never had a chance to win


Thrust upon them each, lies

unto an unblemished heart

shaded and jaded in jealousy

their dignity do they impart


If she only knew, his thoughts

Words, if he only said

the three that mattered most

she would be his instead.


© 2010 InkSlinger


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Aw, InkSlinger. Must you always make me cry, my dear friend. The fourth stanza and the last stanza just about killed me. This time, thankfully, I had a box of tissues by my computer when the tears started to flow. You write beautifully and your words always seem to come from my soul. I love this poem even though it broke my heart.

Posted 13 Years Ago


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Oh my, this is such a breathtaking poem. It's really touching and very beautifully written. The last stanza was amazing, very emotional and sad. Thanks for sharing this wonderful piece.

Posted 13 Years Ago


those 3 magical words that can take an eternity to come out...and great is the loss of their absence... but it's indeed a tough thing to let them flow out as and when they want to.... for their impact is not always as beatiful as the words themselves....this piece however is compried of a wonderful imagery and the story flows like silent tides on a moonless night....the last stanza specially...it just about sums up everything... thoughts to me however count more than words...perhaps the eyes to read those thoughts were missing..or maybe the heart wanted to hear and not see....

Posted 13 Years Ago


"He wishes on stars
shooting about the night sky
in fields of long tall grass
where often, his dreams would die"

Oh, I can echo these beautiful, stirring sentiments...your words have the power to evoke such deep, heartfelt emotions and you use your skills to masterful effect... yes, you do!

Stunning write...as always!

Posted 13 Years Ago


Say the three words, dang it!!! LOL!

If it was only that easy for some...what a great write - such regret, such truth for so many.

Posted 13 Years Ago


Sometimes those words must be said in order to keep the one you love. You have created a vivid story with lots of imagery that is pictured in the mind. This is a great write once again that tells a sad tale of love lost.

Posted 13 Years Ago


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Shattered hearts like puzzles
every piece, a place of its own

A heartbreaking piece, loved it.
How some of us long to hear those 3 little words that have such a huge impact



Posted 13 Years Ago


Heart breaking, beautiful write :)

Peace
Robin

Posted 13 Years Ago


GREAT

Posted 13 Years Ago


0 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Beautiful write! Ahhh...the shoulda, woulda, coulda of life. 3 little words, perhaps "I Love You" could have made a difference OR could the 3 words have been "Please Don't Go"? I like how you've positioned this write so that each reader could come to their own conclusion of what they might have said to change the outcome. Wonderful!

Posted 13 Years Ago


"aww"..is my same reaction like kyncan. I think it's because we are rooting for these two throughout your piece and when it doesn't happen we are "shattered" ourselves.
p.s. "last lucid nod"...its like butter.. :)

Posted 13 Years Ago



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