shredding straps

shredding straps

A Poem by J. Elsie


In the latest hour of the night

And the earliest hour of the morning

My mind ran through the memories

Of dance shoes I've hung to goodbye

                           Into the momentum, the music

                                                The minutes and measures

                                                  Movement, mechanical motions

                                    Emotion, choreographical commotion

                        Endurance, Internal-Eternal Assurance

The consistencies that came with

Footwork, following each note on tiptoe

Bending the Breaks between Tones

Pas de bourree, Pirouette, Plie

Ascending Allegro, Assemble, 

Arabesque, then Balance

 

The evidence of my ballet days

Holds in strong legs, point-toed poise

Never mastered Fouette en tournant

But I was there,

                                       I am still,

                                                At the barre,

                                                             On the stage,

I am graceful in worn slippers

                                                                                   held on by shredding straps


© 2008 J. Elsie



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I dunno much about dance but it wasn't necessary to find this poem accessible. I really dug the sense of movement I got from the form. Almost like it was following a rhythm or beat. Maybe in the shape of a shredding strap? The emotion and serious tone was consistent throughout. Thanks for the read.

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The first line of your profile reminded me of a word in an etymology book I have. So I figured I'd share it with you. Here goes....

Sprezzatura (spretts-ah-Too-rah. Noun) Borrowed from Italian...it's basically the art of making the difficult look effortless.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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I dunno much about dance but it wasn't necessary to find this poem accessible. I really dug the sense of movement I got from the form. Almost like it was following a rhythm or beat. Maybe in the shape of a shredding strap? The emotion and serious tone was consistent throughout. Thanks for the read.

P.S.
The first line of your profile reminded me of a word in an etymology book I have. So I figured I'd share it with you. Here goes....

Sprezzatura (spretts-ah-Too-rah. Noun) Borrowed from Italian...it's basically the art of making the difficult look effortless.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Beautiful. Provokes effortless nostalgia in the reader. I'm almost questioning if I ever did ballet because I'm connecting so well to the poem!

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

very artistically done...your words trapped all the beauty of a ballet. passion flows in this piece and the reader can definitely feel it.

Posted 7 Years Ago


this reads just as well the second time around . . . glad to see you. :)

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I like this poem, because you have a topic that clearly moved you to express it, and a passion and knowledge for what you're writing about that shines through (or else you've done your homework well). Also, I like the way the words move back and forth across the page, lending a sort of motion to the print which fits the poem well.

However, (and maybe this expectation is just me) on a second read-through, once I realized you were writing about dance, I was kind of expecting to find some kind of consistent (or consistently changing) meter or rhythm. There are odd syllables here and there which throw off any rhythm innate to the lines themselves, and with no pattern of beats or measured lines, it lacks the feeling of a dance to me.

To sum up, I like the poem, and it doesn't need meter to be successful (obviously, glancing at previous comments) but if you too felt there was something missing, or something to be improved upon, that's what I would look into.

Posted 8 Years Ago


well, it's pretty obvious you do ballet. hahaha!

very exquisite from form to delivery! your form is really brilliant.

the words are written in a way that the words just flow out of your mouth and the readers actually get to have the impression of what it is like being in your shoes via the gorgeous form.

one of the most idyllic works i've ever read and i'm certainly a fan.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

You are graceful. Something I will never be. The words have such turn and poise. I enjoyed this look backward. I see a little girl and a grown up woman all at once in that mirror.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Wow. I really love this.

It was all tied together so well. The end was really what "hit" me.

Thanks for sharing.

-R

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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Nice movement, great picture, gives me a since of what, it just may feel like to dance in hopes,
Jan/Uisiom


Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Amazing poem. The format, the meter, rhymes - everything. I absolutely love this. And as a fellow dancer I can definitly relate. :-) Once a dancer always a dancer.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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