An Old Friend (Poem)

An Old Friend (Poem)

A Poem by Jen Marks
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This poem is based of the quick rough story I wrote in Writer's Craft class about a renewal of a friendship. I personally think this poem is better than the story itself!

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I hated myself

And I told her that

I wasn't myself

And I told her that

 

But sometimes I change

And I become what I'm not

The other me

Doesn't like her one bit

 

I would never dream

Of telling her that

 

"Let her go"

"Let her go," the other me would say

"It's either her or me, you know"

 

Cursing

Under my breath

Contemplating

 

It had become

More and more present

It got to a point

Where it was never absent

 

The other me had taken over

It had consumed me

Unknowingly

...But willingly

 

So in that moment

With my friend

I told her what was on my mind

 

Sacrifice

 

I let her go

I couldn't commit

A murder-suicide


© 2010 Jen Marks



Author's Note

Jen Marks
Don't be too harsh on me. This was just a quick thing I scribbled down in class. There is no editing done to it whatsoever. Here's the original story if you want to bother: http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/JenMarks/494740/

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Wow, this is really great! Even if it was a quick jot down, you can hardly tell it has not yet been edited. I think it's fabulous! This speaks of an inner battle between the person you used to be, and the person taking over. One is less favorable, and unfortunately more prominent. This is a battle I have definitely fought before, and one you have described here extremely well. Great job!

Posted 7 Years Ago


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HEY LOVE THIS POEM. IT SO TRUE ABOUT HAVING THOSE MIXED EMOTIONS AND IDENTIFYING WITH THEM. ALWAYS LOVE THY SELF AND BE TRUE.

Posted 3 Months Ago


I'm pretty obsessed with the topic of self-dialogue, so this was a good psychological read! I like your style.

Posted 6 Years Ago


looked edited to me :P or at least that you're just so amazing that it your writing doesn't need revision haha
this was great, i'm not sure i fully understand it because i can see it being so many things, but i'm very content with that... :) great write

Posted 6 Years Ago


Wow, this is really great! Even if it was a quick jot down, you can hardly tell it has not yet been edited. I think it's fabulous! This speaks of an inner battle between the person you used to be, and the person taking over. One is less favorable, and unfortunately more prominent. This is a battle I have definitely fought before, and one you have described here extremely well. Great job!

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Jen Marks
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