Emptiness

Emptiness

A Poem by David Kaminsky
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It never lets go of you..

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Emptiness

In the darkness of the night,
A strangling force grabs your heart,
It softens, it hurts, it voids. 
It takes your breath,
Makes your gasp for air,
For love,
For life. 

It surrounds your body,
You feel the pull at your fingertips,
You reach for it,
Strive for it,
Live for it,
But in the end, 
It's not there. 
Emptiness. 

© 2010 David Kaminsky


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I see that you have this talent of explaining feelings in a simple way.
for me, emptiness comes in the form of a sick, hollow feeling in my stomach that won't go away no matter what.

My only suggestion is for the third line: "It softens, it hurts, it empties" Perhaps using another word besides "empties" would make it stronger, because the poem is already about emptiness.

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Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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so schön (so beautiful).


Posted 12 Years Ago


I see that you have this talent of explaining feelings in a simple way.
for me, emptiness comes in the form of a sick, hollow feeling in my stomach that won't go away no matter what.

My only suggestion is for the third line: "It softens, it hurts, it empties" Perhaps using another word besides "empties" would make it stronger, because the poem is already about emptiness.

This review was written for a previous version of this writing

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

amazing!

This review was written for a previous version of this writing

Posted 13 Years Ago


Yet again, amazing.

This review was written for a previous version of this writing

Posted 13 Years Ago



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