Drowning

Water surrounds my very being,

There's no air and I can't breathe.

 

I'm being suffocated,

In this bottomless nothing.

 

My vision is blurry,

And my world starts to turn dark.

 

Pain surges throughout my body,

And I start to lose my sense of reality.

 

What is wrong and right?

Where do I go to be okay?

 

Where is this freedom,

That I used to hear about?

Where is this happiness,

That I had in my grasp?

 

Water enters my lungs,

And I start to go limp.

 

Theres no hope for me anymore.

I can't take this pain anymore.

It' really, really just too much for me to handle...

 

Now my eyes are closed,

Visible tears seep out through my eyes.

They float through the water,

All of the ocean knowing my sadness.

 

In the end,

I'm dead...

Drowning in pain...

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Draven]

The first few lines are a little off. You say tht you feel like you are suffocating, but LIKE is a bad word to use, being that you already stated there is no air, which means that you WOULD in fact be suffocating. But the rest is great, fillrd with lots of vivid imagery.