Ease My Troubled Mind

I'm going to lay my head on that lonesome railroad line
 and let the 2:19 ease my troubled mind
 for too long my life's been lonely and cold
 filled with deceit and promises untold
 so everyday my mindset is fade away
 going to take all my pain away today
 call me crazy call me insane
 but I'm so f*****g sick of the pain
 so the day when I finally go away
 will be the day I'm happiest I can truly say
 have you ever been hurt to the point you couldn't even cry
 your only option to get fucked up and wish to die
 oh I'm just a troubled soul
 who thinks this game of life is far too old
 these words from the wise is the last I'll say
 it's better to burn out than fade away

Author's Note

comments and reviews please

Reviews

[ANTO]

The sense of despair that comes from this writing is really strong and the train image gave me shivers.
Its a well written poem

[kayamon215]

thank you for the review

[StarlaFireDelta]

you know reading more these are songs
do it player and beleive it

[fiery-san]

A very intense piece but may I suggest that you divide the lines because the emotions here seemed too condensed... it seemed like I was reading a paragraph rather than a stanza and I can't get a nice gist of what you're trying to convey because of the bulk... anyways keep on writing and improving. ^_^

[kayamon215]

thanks for the tip :) I'll work on that