The Unseen Hand

An attempt to describe a state of confusions.

Wherever I see, 

Just crowds and crowds,

all around

but not a single man

to find

I am on a mountain top

the sky far far away

billowing clouds surround me

Not a single drop of rain

Hopes are doomed to vain?

I just can not believe 

the river is flowing though

its natural way

An unseen force grips

and brings all to a sway.

Reviews

[Umar Hassan]

The first and second stanza describe apparent contradictions that confuse the observer who regains or resolves them by observing the wisdom of a river. If you harmonize the persons in the stanzas from you, I, I, to I, I, I the poem's point of view will be strengthened. Repeating nouns (crowds and crowds, far(?), far) works best to establish a beat or rhythm. Does it work here? I'm a stickler for spelling; its a good obsession for writers.

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

An unseen force grips and brings all to sway........yes, life does seem to do this......excellent piece KD :)

[Becky C Strukamp]

I can see the imagery well, it takes me away to a calm and I rest there amongst the beauty that you have penned so well. Excellent Poem.