America

An outlook on life.

AMERICA.

 

She is like my mistress

Sure she lies to me

She cheats on me

At the end of the day i stay with her

Because shes the best thing going.

 

America

 

You promised me when i was poor

if i only worked hard

I could have whatever I wanted

I still dont have s**t

 

America

 

You said things would be grand

You said keep your head up

Now i waste my nights in a factory

More broke then when i lived in the projects

 

America

 

You tell me drugs are bad

Yet all the worst drugs are legal

You say obey the law

Yet all the rich people are criminals

 

America

 

I long for the days of my youth

I would wrap myself in the flag

I believed in you

Wanted to be a good american

 

America

 

I still love you

Have you ever loved me 

Reviews

[Linda Marie Van Tassell]

Despite all of the hardships, I like that you ended this poem with the positive notion of "I still love you."

"Have you ever loved me?" is a resounding question that echoes in the silence, still awaiting its answer.

That you compare your motherland to a lover is quite astute.

Linda Marie Van Tassell

[Salvatore Buttaci]

Congratulations for winning the Bukowski contest!

[S.S.P.]

fantastic poem John. thanks for entering the Buk comp ;)

[mR668]

That's wassup John! Nice American dream......and then YOU WAKE UP! DAMN! very nice write bruh!

[E-man]

wow very nice .. what happened to that "american dream"?

[Salvatore Buttaci]

Good poem! It shows the paradox that is America and shows it well.

Sal

[Bill Grimes Jr.]

Powerful poetry John......
"Have you ever loved me"

Sums it up nicely.......


"You tell me drugs are bad

Yet all the worst drugs are legal"

A statement for the ages........

Well done my friend. I enjoyed......

:-)

[Kloud_Nine]

Wow, this whole entire piece is a symbolic metaphoric relationship between one's motherland and one's self. Each line has it's meaning individually as well as a whole when it's all strung up and brought together. There's a very true and elaborate picture it paints and in that picture is a very dark message (from my prospective anyway) but it's true.

"America...that b***h betta not be cheatin on us...with China!" lol sorry reminds me of a very cool story my friend wrote long ago. Anyway, thanks for sharing.

[Jessica M.]

a true story of sticking with it.
America is a dream, sometimes that's all we need to believe in.
nice write.

thanks for the review!