Torn Apart

Torn Apart

A Poem by "Fanatical Dreamer"

"My Lovely Daughter"

Those were the words

her innocent heart craved for.

 

But instead, they heartlessly showered

bitter words. Bitter words that gave

her raining tears.

 

Raining tears which drained into her

empty soul. Her empty soul that got

trapped into her uncertain mind.

 

An uncertain mind unable to control

her desperate body. A desperate body

longing for a genuine love.

 

"My Lovely Daughter"

Three simple words!

How could the human mind be so hostile?


Thank you for your time!

      

©Fanatical Dreamer




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DJ
A sad write here. Child abuse/neglect is so hard to overcome. I felt the agony and injustice in this write. Touched my heart.

Posted 5 Years Ago


 "Fanatical Dreamer"

5 Years Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing
A very sad one...children are so innocent and give love unconditionally...nice write...Rose

Posted 5 Years Ago


 "Fanatical Dreamer"

5 Years Ago

Thanks
It has bite...but I don't feel the anger...

Posted 5 Years Ago


 "Fanatical Dreamer"

5 Years Ago

Thank you for reading and commenting
A very touching write. I have been there too...

Keep writing!

Posted 5 Years Ago


 "Fanatical Dreamer"

5 Years Ago

Will do,Thanks for reading
I really like the repetition in each grouping - makes what's being said that much more powerful and thought provoking. Excellent last line, too!

Posted 5 Years Ago


 "Fanatical Dreamer"

5 Years Ago

Thanks for the constructive remark
Understand this to be a pladoyer of more communication between parents and children.
A noble thought and a good write.

Posted 5 Years Ago


 "Fanatical Dreamer"

5 Years Ago

Thank you!
Delivered quick and sharp, mush like the blows suffered by the broken souls that this refers to. Think maybe it could have gone a little deeper. How could the human mind be so hostile? is indeed a great question.

Posted 5 Years Ago


 "Fanatical Dreamer"

5 Years Ago

Thank you for your suggestions
This is very thought provoking and full of emotion. You definately give a good sense of the pain she has experienced.
A good piece of work.



Posted 5 Years Ago


 "Fanatical Dreamer"

5 Years Ago

Thank you!

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