The City Came Before the Freeway

The City Came Before the Freeway

A Poem by JohnsDavidburg
"

. some progress is purely superficial .

"

before the freeway the city was still here

naked in the darkness she existed for years

vibrant in sunlight

huddled under starlight. . .

        clustered together

        enhancing survival


way back when; during an age of pure reason


way before the fashion's came

it was the "tits" to be "mainstream"


in the way back in when

when it was very hard to survive

    - alone and exposed -


. . .  there was that purpose beforehand

dressed for the darkness

once all light was equal

  -  and now we are this

fashioned and partitioned

into Lost Copies

with no Originals


without context

judging survival as commuters

oblivious to all origins

  

          the caveman was no dumber

     (though he would be confused)

 





© 2018 JohnsDavidburg



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This was great. I enjoyed the word play and the message behind it. The subject of this stuff comes to my mind quite often actually. The thought that everyone wants to be an individual or unique, but these days, everyone is just playing off someone else. There aren't really any original ideas anymore. I enjoyed this, and made me think about it a little more. Thank you.

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JohnsDavidburg

3 Weeks Ago

I'm glad you enjoyed. Unfortunately for me poems about nothing being original are not at all origin.. read more



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This was great. I enjoyed the word play and the message behind it. The subject of this stuff comes to my mind quite often actually. The thought that everyone wants to be an individual or unique, but these days, everyone is just playing off someone else. There aren't really any original ideas anymore. I enjoyed this, and made me think about it a little more. Thank you.

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

JohnsDavidburg

3 Weeks Ago

I'm glad you enjoyed. Unfortunately for me poems about nothing being original are not at all origin.. read more
This writing is the tits! Go Eagles.

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JohnsDavidburg

3 Weeks Ago

Thanks. No Eagles. Tom Brady. That is all.
This is such an interesting comparison between now and then, and you did a spectacular job in weaving the two together to create something so beautifully different. A brilliant idea that is so well executed.

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the line "and now we are this" caught me the first time i read through this. other phrases jump out the more i read: "in the way back in when"; "once all light was equal"; "during an age of pure reason". i keep reading this over and over. i keep thinking about how epistemology shifts as time goes by--how we know things, what we deem to be reasonable and why.... thanks for sharing this! i just want to keep reading it over and over again!

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JohnsDavidburg

3 Weeks Ago

Thanks, I'm glad you enjoyed.

If you looking for more on the whole "becoming a cop.. read more
TK, I might be digging deeper than intended. There's much here to unpack. Of course, both the city and the freeway were man's inventions, some will argue for survival. Still, your point isn't lost, at least how I interpret it. The freeway and our connectivity have made us mere copies of each other. No original shining cities, original people, or original thought left... or little of it. It's a drive to conformity (pun intended), and we're driving as fast as we can. Another thought-provoking write. (Please excuse the long-winded, twisted review. The product of little sleep).

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JohnsDavidburg

3 Weeks Ago

Thanks for taking the time Robert. It's not really about cities and freeways of course... the conce.. read more
A pleasant read that left me longing to return to nature and truly liberate myself from the infrastructure of the current freeways. Interesting flow with impeccable word choice, overall I quite enjoyed this read.

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JohnsDavidburg

3 Weeks Ago

Thanks GW. I'm glad you liked my word choice.

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